On Angels & Architecture

By Blood Saga

I went to an abandoned building last night
and wrote a poem.

When I get like this
I like to look at old buildings
and imagine
that there's someone out there
as lonely as I am.

I thought I was making progress
that I had a small something
worth telling my therapist.

But the poem turned out to be the same
nonsensical splatter of words as always.

Do you understand me?

Come on down to earth
like angels slumming
and get high with us
simple-minded mortals.

It'll be quite like dreaming.


You'll see. . .


You just love and love
until you can't anymore
and then you die.


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Copyright 2011 Blood Saga
Published on Tuesday, May 24, 2011.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, May 25, 2011, carlosjackal (3010)By person wrote:

    I liked this very much..Solid write.

  • A former member wrote: the title snagged me [my own parallels]. ....and your darkly lit personal vignette shadows so much my own i was startled and then felt an intense connectivity; of being unalone. which sent me into deep spiral thought......what if we all fell to love? to life? to light? the irony of an angel falling to get HIGH on something 'real', tangible...nothing dreamed up.....the reality of stark emotion, humanity, we are all simply dualities battling our own half.lights.....and wanting to ascend/transcend\BE. .. .. .just be..something beyond just us.....or maybe only us?.and maybe if we are grand enough, still enough, open enough...we can just be within another...even briefly. smashing write. you hit my softest spot.

  • A former member wrote: wow.. brilliant right. bursting with a battered soul. moving. angels would have to be idiotic not to come down and get high.. fantabulous piece!

  • A former member wrote: I liked this ... very moving ... I've loved till I could not anymore...but have not yet died.

  • A former member wrote: I think it's mediocre, but then again, I suck at poetry, so I'm being as fair as possible. Perhaps the Angels will come 'down and get high' metaphorically with us. It's a pity that such a thing does not exist.

  • Blood Saga On Tuesday, May 24, 2011, Blood Saga (81)By person wrote:

    Err...thank you? I appreciate you taking the time to read it, despite its mediocrity.

  • A former member wrote: Love the last stanza, it keeps the poem alive after the words have run out.

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