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need you now
By A Life Without You
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Slowly pushed
Shaken
Misunderstood
Words so perfectly clear
Gaze upon the life you took
This is done in silence
From anxious eyes
Bury me
Beneath your light
Together
Broken free
Saving each other
Pulling our limbs from this tree
Fight
For the rest of our life
Cover me
One last night
Forever Complete
Never thanked you for that
Promise me
Never had a chance
A world within
Crashing down
Forgotten hope
...Need you now
Note: I don't normally write in this kind of structure but it was a friendly
challenge a couldn't pass up... and i actually enjoyed this style of writing
believe it or not... simple yet complex, but forever remain a beat poet...
enjoy
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Copyright 2010 A Life Without You
Author's Note:
This is just a small journey through loves broken arms, it is in essence supposed to be written simple with only using words that carry importance, a neat idea, I enjoyed writing it?Comments on "need you now"
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On Wednesday, June 30, 2010, Gray Vision
(425)
wrote:
I respect you going out of your comfort zone to take on these new styles, thats poetry in it self. Keep growing, keep expanding my friend. Great write and thank you very much for sharing =)
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A former member wrote:
You should write more like this I like it :)
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On Friday, May 7, 2010, Dilated View
(583) wrote:
I really enjoyed the structure as well. It kept me hanging on to each line and kept the pace going. An interesting read :)
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A former member wrote:
I can tell a lot of passion is involved in this.
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A former member wrote:
It was great and hard hitting. It meant a lot and came through beautifully. It was nice to see your diversity. Well done. =)
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On Thursday, April 22, 2010, Malcholm Dark
(810) wrote:
Wow, that was awesome... pretty good for the first time... a good writer can master any structure.... write more like this.... I challenge you, more please...lol... thanks
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