Un furnished Please
By surething
the snags
bleeding
through satin
patches
will never
elaborate upon
worthy request;
they will not
emerge
from jagged
cocoons
taking the form
of silk
scarves
she braids
through
her
hair.
Nor can the bouts
of such timid tempests
approach
the breeze
which silk
and honey
skin
begets-
all the while
delighting
further
in the continuity
of curving
femininity.
I am
wet with
glorious
residue:
emerald rain.
Neither the drops
which reflect
the Sun's
attempt
to brown the bottom
of my heel,
(nor the shine of
Achilles’ shield
amidst the deflect
of man's misfortune)
will distract you
from her sweat
resting in
the company
of love's stamp
below her
nectarined nose.
clovers tangled
in my strands
attempt to mask
the aroma of
desire
leaving my pores.
Surely not
for passing
eyes
to regard with
rudimentary winks,
but to feel
the weight
of asymmetry
inhaled
through your
windows;
to feel God
sigh
with relief
as you close your eyes.
She is grace unknown,
but I am
the
uneven,
unfinished,
irreversible
angle
of
Love.
Comments on "Un furnished Please"
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On Tuesday, January 19, 2010, blue
(1409) wrote:
mmm... had to read this a few more times... wonderful. ~b
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On Tuesday, January 19, 2010, blue
(1409) wrote:
O my... this is one of those writes that quite literally bring shivers with each new line.. I won't attempt to engage this with commentary... I...am engaged. ~b
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On Friday, April 22, 2011, stryder
(160) wrote:
who are you engaged to?
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A former member wrote:
wow!!! ~ hdb.
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On Friday, July 17, 2009, estherbell
(52) wrote:
this is excellence.
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On Friday, July 17, 2009, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Fuck.
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On Friday, July 17, 2009, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
The form, the flow, the words and bend of the phrases...Just one question, how'd you come to the title you chose? -Carl
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On Friday, July 17, 2009, surething
(51) wrote:
well thank you for the feedback! The title was orginally 'unfurnished pleas' and then I wanted to play around with the whole theme of imperfections, which is interwoven throughout the write. I was going to mispell unfurnished and pleas, however it just didn't feel right. So Unfunfurnished relating to imperfect, and Please (sounding like 'pleas')) referring to the acceptance and love within the imperfections. Hope that made sense :)
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On Friday, July 17, 2009, surething
(51) wrote:
haha *unfurnished, and that typo was not done with purpose
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On Saturday, July 18, 2009, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Cool :) Oh, and Welcome to DP (a bit bloody late now but better late than never, eh?)
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On Saturday, July 18, 2009, surething
(51) wrote:
I appreciate the welcome at any time! thank you for the kind words, they really are appreciated!
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On Thursday, July 16, 2009, ALBATROSS
(194) wrote:
I felt this poem cling to my lungs and stay with me the whole night. To read what you write of insecurity involved with embracing love is so ironic; The limn of your mind articulated transforms these catalyst characteristics into something that deserve anyone's love and assimilation. I stand humbled in your presence of mind and body and will cling to my desire for your hand as your words clung to the deepest depths of myself. Yet you make me breathe easier. What a magnificent soul you wield.
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On Thursday, July 16, 2009, Sketso
(416) wrote:
usually, such short lines create a sense of stop and go interruption, stutters of a sort, but this was one rhythmic ride... right up to the point where abrupt disconnection was intended. Also, the play with the line-up, so to speak, creating visuals (curves and such) was fair near amazing! Quite the nice touch and read.
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On Wednesday, July 15, 2009, The Lipstick Factor
(287) wrote:
Lush, aromatic, and colorful. My favorite line--"in the continuity of curving femininity."--fair rolls off the tongue! Kudos--excellent write.