transposing ash

By AniDayz

smolder.


.




displaying


fractions of a moonbeam dancing in fragmented language
upon your lips


do i have to


decipher

the meaning of the inbetweens


as i taste the eclipse

of personification


taste
the triangular manifestation

of fear unspoken
in the verbosity

of your fingers

intertwining in the webs

woven


by stipulations.


seeing
and being,
living and breathing
beyond the makeshift
paradox


i wonder

if you'd crumble

beneath, between

the fingers of


love


intangibly unraveling the

tangibility

of





you




in the bedsheets of


vulnerability




.
.
.



like it or not







i see.





.
.
.






...

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© 2009 AniDayz
Published on Sunday, February 15, 2009.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • The Lipstick Factor On Thursday, March 26, 2009, The Lipstick Factor (287)By person wrote:

    Creative and original--love how you started it with just "smolder"--great word, I was hooked right then. "do i have to decipher the meaning of the inbetweens"--my favorite part. Really well done-kudos.

  • A former member wrote: ...im tossing on whether this could be intimate and soft or sryptic and cutting. . . the afterburning of something gone wrong or wonderfully right; guess that is the elegance of well done poetry. .. even the falling out of words, liek 'ash'...fluttering down the spine of a mind. . .. and the internal rhymes. . . structure, all create the ambience. cheerios~

  • Sketso On Monday, February 16, 2009, Sketso (416)By person wrote:

    it is neither, yet both. I was cut deeply deciding on whether or not I lived true: to others, to myself, to the ever after... and it made me wonder if all three were possible. Am I a flame, burning bright, or am I the rush of sparks before the ashes. Do I feed the fire, or am I consumed? Quite the thought provoking work. beyond the makeshift paradox indeed! now to figure out if I've "gone wrong or wonderfully right".

  • A former member wrote: wouldnt it be nice to read a poem without any self.bias at all? lol. .. . ..i know what you mean, indeed, i DO. . .

  • carlosjackal On Monday, February 16, 2009, carlosjackal (2787)By person wrote:

    Superb..I'm lost for even a half-decent comment for this piece. Wrapped up and absorbed, I loved every line :) -Carl

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