transposing ash
By AniDayz
smolder.
.
displaying
fractions of a moonbeam dancing in fragmented language
upon your lips
do i have to
decipher
the meaning of the inbetweens
as i taste the eclipse
of personification
taste
the triangular manifestation
of fear unspoken
in the verbosity
of your fingers
intertwining in the webs
woven
by stipulations.
seeing
and being,
living and breathing
beyond the makeshift
paradox
i wonder
if you'd crumble
beneath, between
the fingers of
love
intangibly unraveling the
tangibility
of
you
in the bedsheets of
vulnerability
.
.
.
like it or not
i see.
.
.
.
...
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© 2009 AniDayz
Published on Sunday, February 15, 2009.
Filed under:
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On Thursday, March 26, 2009, The Lipstick Factor
(287) wrote:
Creative and original--love how you started it with just "smolder"--great word, I was hooked right then. "do i have to decipher the meaning of the inbetweens"--my favorite part. Really well done-kudos.
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A former member wrote:
...im tossing on whether this could be intimate and soft or sryptic and cutting. . . the afterburning of something gone wrong or wonderfully right; guess that is the elegance of well done poetry. .. even the falling out of words, liek 'ash'...fluttering down the spine of a mind. . .. and the internal rhymes. . . structure, all create the ambience. cheerios~
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On Monday, February 16, 2009, Sketso
(416) wrote:
it is neither, yet both. I was cut deeply deciding on whether or not I lived true: to others, to myself, to the ever after... and it made me wonder if all three were possible. Am I a flame, burning bright, or am I the rush of sparks before the ashes. Do I feed the fire, or am I consumed? Quite the thought provoking work. beyond the makeshift paradox indeed! now to figure out if I've "gone wrong or wonderfully right".
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A former member wrote:
wouldnt it be nice to read a poem without any self.bias at all? lol. .. . ..i know what you mean, indeed, i DO. . .
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On Monday, February 16, 2009, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Superb..I'm lost for even a half-decent comment for this piece. Wrapped up and absorbed, I loved every line :) -Carl