Parking meters/Coin Dollars.(falling of the edge of the world)
By colorapathy
On the edge of the world,
I begged for change,
From the automated parking attendant,
Where I had lodged my brain.
He denied me my due,
And in a loving "screw you"
Gave me a coin dollar
As useless as muddied water,
A certain atypical change,
That people only collect and bane,
Much like what’s left of my soul,
Chiseled off and sold for coal,
That keeps the fires of ghost town's burning,
And I find another lesson I'm learning,
Even dead I have no use,
Lighting the way for a palace without truth,
And this ironically reminds me why I came,
To the breathless end of this celestial ball's plane,
I set my foot over the ledge,
And disappear over the edge,
Only to find myself back at the start,
I suppose they told the truth in part,
The world was round from stop to start,
And now I find just one more part,
One more thing I can't do right,
I can't even disappear from human sight,
I glance back into eternity,
Laid out before me gracefully,
I take a running leap, and here I stand,
With my feet firmly planted on dry land.
Comments on "Parking meters/Coin Dollars.(falling of the edge of the world)"
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A former member wrote:
I'm thoroughly enjoying all of your entries to the site thus far. This is no exception. Your tone is very dark, in a more classic manner, while still remaining modern. Rhyme or formulated poetry doesn't usually prove itself intriguing enough to keep my interest, but this definitely did. There were a few lines that stood out to me, but the closing two lines definitely were the most outspoken of all those in the poem. Well done.
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On Tuesday, April 8, 2008, colorapathy
(50) wrote:
thank you very much. I do tend toward rhymes, but only because it makes my brain feel better .. >.> although I also do very freeform poetry as well. At any rate, I appreciate the comment!
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A former member wrote:
i loves your style dude. im so favoriting you. ^_^ so much talent. ^_^
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On Monday, April 7, 2008, colorapathy
(50) wrote:
lol. thank you very much! Oh yeah.. I'm a girl. Just by the way. ;)
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A former member wrote:
lol, oops. eh, i call everybody dude. so kickass ^_^
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On Tuesday, April 8, 2008, colorapathy
(50) wrote:
lol np ^_^
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A former member wrote:
I agree with Vernon. I also love your style of writing. and also welcome to DP. ~ hdb.
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A former member wrote:
wow, I love your style of writing. Its very clever. You'll fit in well. WELCOME TO DARK POETRY!! Just fix spelling errors and this will be perfect. ][ ][
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On Monday, April 7, 2008, colorapathy
(50) wrote:
thank you very much! I think I caught them all. I'm simply horrid at spelling.
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On Monday, April 7, 2008, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
I agree. Welcome. The dry, ironic humour here reminds me alot of Isaac Brock, and Modest Mouse.
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On Monday, April 7, 2008, colorapathy
(50) wrote:
Thank you!