the girl in the musicbox.

By i tremble

saturnine melodies
from a child's
musicbox
shimmer
like stars
above the
silence
as she dances,
in circles,
on her toes.

close the box
and she'll drop
like a doll,
pale pinafore
falling like
snow.

she'll hide in
the darkness
till you let in
the light
and force her
to dance
to a desolate
tune.

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Published on Tuesday, August 29, 2006. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "the girl in the musicbox."

On Friday, February 8, 2008, Syringe (51) wrote:

wow u took something that one would think as inanimate (or inadequate) twisted the viewer's perspective.
On Saturday, September 1, 2007, thelostmessenger (112) wrote:

wow. this is awesome. i loved it. *messenger
On Saturday, November 4, 2006, Jaded Jezzabelle (328) wrote:

incredible...i had forgot all about the tiny dancers in the music boxes of yesterday...so long ago and you captured the feeling they let perfectly.
On Wednesday, October 4, 2006, hate_doll (265) wrote:

fucking brilliant. I love te structure, it reminds me of a tiny dancer, tightly wound.
On Tuesday, October 3, 2006, blue (1454) wrote:

=) wow, every piece I read of yours has that something.. that draw. nice! ~b
On Thursday, September 14, 2006, Six-Out (1435) wrote:

oh wow. I love this.
On Wednesday, August 30, 2006, K_Love (525) wrote:

This was beautiful. Feeling trapped inside something only for others, like their toy to play with, to listen to. Wonderful. You must upgrade or we will all haunt you!! :)
On Wednesday, August 30, 2006, MESUN (230) wrote:

om my fucking god. that is amazing. quite beautiful. i love it. yes, please stick around.
On Wednesday, August 30, 2006, Rebel_not_Radical (78) wrote:

~i agree with the comments before mine...I'll be looking forward to your works... Very cool
A former member wrote: upgrade or be haunted by dying, wonderland and ME. lol very lovely piece
A former member wrote: Divine. I hope you'll stay here.
On Tuesday, August 29, 2006, ShardsofSilence (222) wrote:

I rather like this piece. Nice write.