Comments by dwells
- "Live in hope and die in despair. Only a fool, or an insane person, never wises up to the game - unless you refuse to play. Older and smarter is inevitable, and hopefully not too jaded or cynical - at the end of the path leading into the clearing in the middle of the forest (Stephen King "The Gunslinger" saga I think?"
Posted by dwells on "The fool" by kenneth
- "Interesting turnabout in the last verse, when the truth finally comes out."
Posted by dwells on "Good dog" by kenneth
- "Very nice effort, more upbeat (even if this is Dark Poetry), and technically perfect - well done."
Posted by dwells on "Charms" by kenneth
- "Maybe you've found it - not the destination but the journey?"
Posted by dwells on "Desire" by kenneth
- "Lucky girl I should say, for your are the sensitive one with a poet's heart!"
Posted by dwells on "My place" by kenneth
- "Aw, you know you won't give up now. We all need to be tortured by something from time to time."
Posted by dwells on "Broken dreams " by kenneth
- "Kenneth - you are becoming quite accomplished. This was soothing and speaks to the fantasies that sometimes linger a while."
Posted by dwells on "Those eyes" by kenneth
- "Hey Kenneth, save something for tomorrow. How about the third stanza, it was a little uneven. Consider the second line to read "And I will not fear danger" - at least it rhymes. An otherwise well written piece, and pardon the unsolicited advice."
Posted by dwells on "Weeping sky" by kenneth
- "Great job matching the tile to the body of work - not everyone succeeds at doing this. Very descriptive and if I may: put a space between every 4th line as you seem to write and rhyme in that classical form (whatever it is called). I know the editing is a lot of work on this website, good job overall and welcome!"
Posted by dwells on "Heartlessness" by kenneth
- "Hi Kenneth - the last line should rhyme I think? Otherwise technically perfect and very well-stated."
Posted by dwells on "Anvils beat" by kenneth
