Comments by A Life Without You
- "It's destiny was too merely accelerate emotions that were already in play, weather good, bad, or sad... It makes me think of an indescribable love, perhaps a love that once existed in this mess of a world we live. but has forever hidden its face... just out of reach... only minutes have passed sense the first few lines, it now draws sadness from me as-well... thanx moony, glad u like"
Posted by A Life Without You on "Within my reach" by A Life Without You
- "much appreciated friend, its something different, you know. Its those mid-day thoughts you wish you could capture before you forget, you just get convicted when they pass through your mind... helps bring us back to earth, or perhaps take us away..."
Posted by A Life Without You on "Masquerading: within " by A Life Without You
- "Hey thanks, i do appreciate the feed back. I guess 9/10 ant bad, it gives me a chance to kind of explain this a bit. My style of writing isn't supposed to be the conventional rhyming paragraphs with perfectly matching syllables, most of my stuff is actually "beat" cut down a bit, cause with beat poetry you can add some of the emotion you want your audience to grasp in the way you present it. This piece was more a less a short story started in a coffee shop between the cheating/lying girl friend n the "Heart on the sleeve" boyfriend. In essence it starts with a conversation but ultimately is comprised with just his thoughts of the hole situation, as she is selfishly rambling on... so only slight conversation in the beginning, most of us have been there at one time or another, most of my pieces are written as "thoughts", to be read line by line, taking a second or two in-between, not jumbled into paragraphs to be skimmed over in 2.3 seconds, yes this is a website comprised of "poetry", unfortunately the majority of occupants don't have time to read it as it was designed. They skim through a work looking for that one key word that will catch there fancy, then they'll try to slow down n read... but anyway, i admire your works so in-turn i appreciate your comments, your a talented poet so i will not take the criticism in vain, but will use it to improve, and will thank you for being honest, and hope to hear more from you on other pieces i have written, thanx again my friend"
Posted by A Life Without You on "Words on a Napkin" by A Life Without You
- "There we go, this is what i was looking for, your right on brother, wild isn't it, you finish it - yet your mind plays on, moving threw different scenarios, as you notice your heart beat starting to race... "
Posted by A Life Without You on "Finding an End..." by A Life Without You
- "Its as if you want it to end, to be over, yet your not sure of the circumstances of where you are at, so maybe fighting for one last breath might be in your best interests... or it might not... either way the cry's are not helping...
lol, thx for stopping by, glad you enjoyed"
Posted by A Life Without You on "Finding an End..." by A Life Without You
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