Comments by All Members
- "'like a lamb dozing by a sword in the poppyfields'...fraught with peril...latent menace...darkly alluring...a disturbing nighttime wander...thanks for the bed-time story Riven
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Posted by kinkifrog on "Roaming In Slumber" by Riven Waker
- "Dark are the corridors of your sunless mind..Shadows that swallow the light,the windows that capture the night..Some haunting imagery in here.. definitely a twisted "realm of Horrors" and sedative in its attempt..Great Job"
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Roaming In Slumber" by Riven Waker
- "a powerful ode..gut wrenching and immortal in tone.....your scripts always philosophize...this one had a premeditation feel by angel dust upon a demons lash such a sinister take....the sense of wander within a dark mind set by what has descended upon its head...so potent in meaning and feel..reverence...amazing"
Posted by Eye of Minerva on "Roaming In Slumber" by Riven Waker
- "This was a fatalistic romance gone bad, who had who?..Deja Vu..were they both spectral and in love, or did they love to hate?..such a deep thought provoking piece..."
Posted by Ceolwulf on "The Universe In Her Eyes" by Riven Waker
- "this is so sick...the decipherment of eye to 3y3 was genius man..superb alchemy as you go on to speak of the conscience..i got the notion that you are speaking in the first passage of death in the exoteric...and the second in an esoteric knowledge of...this was very deep..the 22 could also in my mind confirm a catch 22 as well..regardless of subject matter this was a brilliant script almost like a cryptic code or magic spell..reverence always reverence..\\m/\\m/"
Posted by Eye of Minerva on "Flutter-by" by Riven Waker
- "that is the stuff i am talking about, incredible and entrenched in culling of dark regroup....spoken has a messenger of what will transpire....a mystic harbinger embodies this write...with thunderous words that shall move mountains....the ethereal cosmos blanket there essence within this flawless script of gather....truly compelling commandments and notions....the rune reference was highly majestic and astonishing...a foul spark that tinges the reader, capturing a reflection to unlock themselves....vicious my friend...thy high priest of dark mathematics..\m/..perfectly executed...reverence as always"
Posted by Eye of Minerva on "Go Forth - O Thou Child of Chaos" by Riven Waker
- "the rhyme made the flow very easy... the feel of it was dark, almost eerie yet didn't weigh it down too much... a lot of great images created so effortlessly... well done"
Posted by NikesRain on "The Lunatic Changeling" by Riven Waker
- "once again i am not let down...the phraseology in this is vicious and well strewn....a cryptic transformation through a spiritual immolation unto the moon was well conveyed....and the metaphor of the energy from the spider through its eye is an entrancing epigram....amazing write man..\m/..**bows in reverence**"
Posted by Eye of Minerva on "The Lunatic Changeling" by Riven Waker
- "There are quite a number of images here that I found to be memorable and...seaching for the right word here...perhaps meaningful, that is to say there was truth and perhaps a lesson...anyway another epic write here well done =)"
Posted by Demoness Satanic on "Apostles of Darkness" by Riven Waker
- "An extrodinary piece, well crafted by yet again another of DP's geniuses. Only you can write poetry like this, it's unique, like the fabric of your body is unique. A god indeed, thank you for sharing with us =)"
Posted by Gray Vision on "To Become a God" by Riven Waker
- ""Lacing rivers of blood and pulpy flesh" Splendid imagery w/ some excellent well-crafted rhyme; as much as I like your use of alliteration, it does feel just a little forced (sorry); love that you end on 'crawl' & begin next line w/ 'Cracked skulls...' but I have a hard time feeling the use of 'cadavers' as much as I understand where you are bringing the poem. It's so close to perfect (for me) I just wish the alliteration was less forced; I think (IMO) just switching the 2 words cadavers & corridors around would greatly increase the feel of this excellent poem. I hate giving critique (I know my poems are not always spot on) as I feel like a bit of a dung, but that's my only point of The Great Criticism. The final 2 lines absolutely bring this poem together like a Lovecraftian pulse, "seething & entombed". Also, I love the intro line. Very well done!"
Posted by jonLyndon on "Awaiting Dark Dominion" by Riven Waker
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