life in cars
By jack paper
airport intersection
left turn lane east
red light
red as the lips
of the raven haired beauty
in the south turn lane of the
I-80 interchange
olive skin contrasting
the pale ivory leather interior
white dime store t-shirt clings
to every curve the way
i imagine her red beemer does the road
you're my type lover
and you're drivin' my car
i wanna get to know you
she glances my way
licks her lips
then each finger one by one
oh baby, i caught your eye
as the light turns green
i think about our life together
where we'll live
we make eye contact through
her midnight black oakleys
as i slowly take my turn
she puts another french fry
in her mouth and licks her
delicate fingers
i round the corner
speed on past micky d's
and head on off
to the next intersection
Comments on "life in cars"
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A former member wrote:
I love moments like this :) too bad they always end with people driving on into the same life as before..
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On Saturday, June 30, 2007, Mari
(419) wrote:
hey im brown. pick ME up lol
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A former member wrote:
mmm...this piece was finger lickin' good!I couldn't just read it once ;)
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On Monday, May 7, 2007, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
beautiful
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On Saturday, April 28, 2007, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
I felt like I was there watching this intimate moment happening. And cracking ending, too. -Carl
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On Friday, April 27, 2007, Tania
(192) wrote:
Very vidid and so true.. how often do we find ourselves wondering about the person in the next lane when we stop at the traffic lights.. well, I do all the time..great write.
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On Thursday, April 26, 2007, nur hidayah
(114) wrote:
Mm yes. Teasing piece. I love how car, road and girl are one mysterious, oblivious seductress.
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On Thursday, April 26, 2007, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Like plowing down I-64 with good tunes blaring and the sun on your shades. I brake for tail. lol. great write.
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On Thursday, April 26, 2007, Mistress Shadow
(249) wrote:
No better a way to deal with traffic than to imagine the lives of those behind other wheels and to where they are off to. Lovely interpretation. ~T
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On Thursday, April 26, 2007, Sin
(1135) wrote:
haha instant lust..wicked exchanges that catch us off guard and put a thrill in our veins...brilliant and i love the comic almost sarcastic twist ~kristy