crows on the third line.

By Lynaes

I begged the flutter of morning
to break me
like an empty egg shell
between skeleton fingertips.

because the hushed
neon blue air
spiked with songbirds,
gripped my throat
like a rabid snake
hissing lullabies
in a sadistic tone.


it's like a messenger
for those silent flash backs,
enveloped in chiffon jaundice
that strike the heart
like arteries
clogged
with fat.

for the most part,
I am a grave yard statue.
my stone fingers laid out
awkwardly,
awaiting fractures
caused by saltwater.

riddled with rheumatic dreams,

and wavering,
ever so slightly,
in a breeze that my skin tastes
as if it were the heated breath of a lover
right after sex.

I pressed my toes
into the foam of the shoreline
in the vinyl dust of sunset.
among dead fish eggs,
and delicate strings of sunlight
in the cold water;
I created wet footsteps
and sang about crows
on train tracks,

and how scared I was

that they may step
upon the third line.



scorched black feathers
would be too relevant.

and there is an ebony coating
on my heart.


so I pray for the milky sun
to be a sledgehammer
to my chest.
like a canopy in
an opal dust storm
of runaway orchids,
and familiar scents
left on stained pillows.

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© 2007 Kim Christina Hughes
Published on Sunday, April 22, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: ah, this is nice....

  • A former member wrote: the imagery blends together, the "vinyl dust of sunset"..."milky sun"...i'm just re-reading bits and trying to see how you made this. congrats on potd, well deserved!

  • Mistress Morbid On Sunday, September 23, 2007, Mistress Morbid (405)By person wrote:

    Your words have always stuck me right through the heart, just like a stray arrow. You never cease to amaze me. I miss reading your works. I must dig through more of your poetry and fall in love all over again.

  • A former member wrote: amazing, i loved it. i was gripped from the first stanza to the last. keep writing x

  • Solace On Monday, June 11, 2007, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    Fragility exposed and invitations - the symbols all fit themselves in and away we rush - a milky sun? finding myself entangled and diving around in runaway orchids - the ugliness and precious beauty - like lovers entwined...

  • A former member wrote: "I created wet footsteps and sang about crows on train tracks..." Simply stunning.

  • capt_funguy On Wednesday, May 16, 2007, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    a lot of poets could learn a lot of things by reading just a few of your works ... you could run a clinic on your brand of beautiful ... lullabies , sunsets and sledgehammers do your bidding in broad daylight ... always impressed ... funguy

  • Bella Butchery On Friday, May 4, 2007, Bella Butchery (724)By person wrote:

    everything you write makes me wish you would write something about me... maybe its your metaphors, maybe its your structure, maybe its the percission of your punctuation... i whish i had a girl to write such benevolence, though i know its not about love

  • Bella Butchery On Friday, May 4, 2007, Bella Butchery (724)By person wrote:

    you can turn your pen into a pistol and turn it on anything... you + writing = sex-on-a-stick!

  • A former member wrote: "for the most part, I am a grave yard statue." Wow. Few words literally render me thoughtless in thought. These words especially and everything else as well; just an excellent write. ~Ship!

  • carlosjackal On Tuesday, April 24, 2007, carlosjackal (3021)By person wrote:

    How the fuck am I meant to comment? Just amazing...and I know at some point I will be adding you to my faves ;) You're bloomin' brilliant Platinum Lady :)

  • DowngradeBeauty On Sunday, April 22, 2007, DowngradeBeauty (29)By person wrote:

    The images painted in my head by your words are glamorous. I really enjoyed the last stanza!

  • A former member wrote: Put that last one at the end. +tpu+

  • A former member wrote: electrocution*, awesome. And as I said the ending was quite the icing on the cake. +tpu+

  • A former member wrote: The poem is quite like the second to last stanza, and the ending, the ending. I know it sounds confusing. That's just the way it feels, whether on purpose or accident. Quite an interest detail.

  • A former member wrote: The opening of the 4th stanza threw me off a little and I think it tainted that stanza a bit. The ' for the most part'. But then the line immediately after that stanza strengthened it nicely. The following imagery with the crows and the possibility of ele

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