Alike (when I bit you)
By jack paper
When you came around
I thought "we're alike"
You and I
You said "I see what you are"
So, I remained
True to my nature
And I bit you
I am what I am
How long has it been?
I wanted to make you surrender
To my will, to my way
Envelop you so sweetly
But
You sloped off
Like a tuck-tailed bitch
Sorrowful
Seeking surreptitiously
To get to higher ground
Out of reach
Of piercing eyes
Steely
Seeking satisfaction
In your subjugation
You attached yourself
In some lofty place
Self imposed exile
Safe, softly sleeping
In a silent silk scenario
I laid in wait
for your return
Inactive in your absence
Longing
Now, restless you awake
I feel your ache
I ache too!
You itch and squirm and burn
I burn too!
You seek to break
The walls you've built
I seek escape myself
We ARE alike!
You break through!
Transformed
Beautiful
And I?
I too have lost my skin
My tough exterior
But I remain unchanged?
I watch as you take flight
And I slither off alone
Come back!
I want to pluck your wings!
I am what I am....
You looked so surprised
When I bit you.
sssssss
Awards
Comments on "Alike (when I bit you)"
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A former member wrote:
I forgot this piece...come back, I want to pluck your thoughts ;)
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A former member wrote:
this was wonderful.I love snakes
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On Monday, March 5, 2007, prettydisgrace
(93) wrote:
hmm i really really like this. fantastic!
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A former member wrote:
i pictured vampires..dunno why
but either way
great write
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On Tuesday, February 13, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
fucking awsome ending! made me think of pink floyds the wall, and snake like vampires. i know that is not what you probably meant for, but the images i got were wonderfull!
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A former member wrote:
pretty fuckin awesome
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On Sunday, February 11, 2007, Mari
(419) wrote:
hah. are you a guy? you sure sound like one
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On Monday, February 12, 2007, jack paper
(121) wrote:
*checks for stones.. hmm still there* yeah i'm still a guy!
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A former member wrote:
hahahah!
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
fantastic. you make my mind melt.
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
Great one! I like the way you present the notion of someone assuming they know where you are coming from...and then are surprised when you are just being yourself.
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, Sin
(1135) wrote:
mm the beauty of snakes..slithering with serpentile grace..tongue flickering, tasting..maybe i read too much into this or perhaps my mind is just in the gutter again but i found this erotic and spicy...great write ~kristy