Alike (when I bit you)

By jack paper


When you came around
I thought "we're alike"
You and I

You said "I see what you are"
So, I remained
True to my nature
And I bit you

I am what I am

How long has it been?

I wanted to make you surrender
To my will, to my way
Envelop you so sweetly

But

You sloped off
Like a tuck-tailed bitch
Sorrowful
Seeking surreptitiously
To get to higher ground

Out of reach
Of piercing eyes
Steely
Seeking satisfaction
In your subjugation

You attached yourself
In some lofty place
Self imposed exile
Safe, softly sleeping
In a silent silk scenario

I laid in wait
for your return
Inactive in your absence
Longing

Now, restless you awake
I feel your ache
I ache too!

You itch and squirm and burn
I burn too!

You seek to break
The walls you've built

I seek escape myself
We ARE alike!

You break through!

Transformed

Beautiful

And I?

I too have lost my skin
My tough exterior
But I remain unchanged?


I watch as you take flight
And I slither off alone

Come back!
I want to pluck your wings!

I am what I am....

You looked so surprised
When I bit you.


sssssss








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© 2007 chthonian
Published on Friday, February 9, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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Comments on "Alike (when I bit you)"

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  • A former member wrote: I forgot this piece...come back, I want to pluck your thoughts ;)

  • A former member wrote: this was wonderful.I love snakes

  • prettydisgrace On Monday, March 5, 2007, prettydisgrace (93)By person wrote:

    hmm i really really like this. fantastic!

  • A former member wrote: i pictured vampires..dunno why but either way great write

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, February 13, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    fucking awsome ending! made me think of pink floyds the wall, and snake like vampires. i know that is not what you probably meant for, but the images i got were wonderfull!

  • A former member wrote: pretty fuckin awesome

  • Mari On Sunday, February 11, 2007, Mari (419)By person wrote:

    hah. are you a guy? you sure sound like one

  • jack paper On Monday, February 12, 2007, jack paper (121)By person wrote:

    *checks for stones.. hmm still there* yeah i'm still a guy!

  • A former member wrote: hahahah!

  • Mylissa On Friday, February 9, 2007, Mylissa (825)By person wrote:

    fantastic. you make my mind melt.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Friday, February 9, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    Great one! I like the way you present the notion of someone assuming they know where you are coming from...and then are surprised when you are just being yourself. Scholar

  • Sin On Friday, February 9, 2007, Sin (1135)By person wrote:

    mm the beauty of snakes..slithering with serpentile grace..tongue flickering, tasting..maybe i read too much into this or perhaps my mind is just in the gutter again but i found this erotic and spicy...great write ~kristy

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