The City Flowers
By NeroMatches
“I write poetry but I am no poet,” I told her.
She was on the edge of her seat, listening,
As I unraveled one of the secrets of the universe
While we sat in that pavilion overlooking the city.
“Poets can transfigure the stars into brief
glances from the eye, and I can only imagine doing that.”
And it was true.
Last night, I slept on my rooftop waiting for something profound
To hit me. There was none. Something profound just wasn’t there
And it will never be, I concluded
She said that she didn’t believe me,
And that she thought I could be a poet if I wanted to.
I told her that poets can make people feel
What they feel, make people see the world through
Their eyes, and make people know that they love other people
Just through words
She said that I can
But when she read this, she did not realize that
It was her I was writing about,
And when I told her I loved her
She told me that she did not know what love meant.
I then sat back on the concrete wall
And watched a bird being electrified on a wet cable.
After a while,
She said she heard my heart break
But she did not know that it was only a wine glass
Being thrown over the moon and falling unto the cracks
That lined the beach where the asteroids land.
And there, I began to wonder.
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Comments on "The City Flowers"
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On Tuesday, December 25, 2012, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
I love the way your mind meanders in this. It felt a bit like being in a mirrored room, looking at yourself looking at yourself....... ( not a very clear expression but hopefully you get what I mean)
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On Saturday, November 26, 2011, TyrantAvDetForbannet
(273) wrote:
This one as well, great write!
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A former member wrote:
oh wow! i loved this. tears were trying to fight their way out as i read this. i feel this. i can never write something this deep down, it's refreshing to be able to read it from another soul.
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On Thursday, February 1, 2007, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
I certainly believe you've just made me feel what you were feeling. This so wonderfully honest. scattered, delicate and pretty pieces of speaking from the heart..
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On Thursday, February 1, 2007, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
like those little silver stars you get in a plastic tube, strewn over a glass table. Vivid, beautiful. I love this.
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A former member wrote:
"I then sat back on the concrete wall And watched a bird being electrified on a wet cable." This is poignant, powerful, the perfect kind of poetic prose that I like. The poetry is in the telling of the story, and it is poetic,...
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On Friday, December 15, 2006, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
Wow..I loved the conversational tone of this..like the recounting of a story to a friend. Jules, you're most definitely a poet.
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On Wednesday, October 11, 2006, mozarts cat
(183) wrote:
i still love this ..
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
. . .stellar-if-ically.spoken. . .
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
just added it to my favorites. thank you for writing this.
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
I HAVE FUCKING GOOSEBUMPS. THIS IS THE BEST THING I'VE READ ALL DAY.
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
This simply glows.
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, Rebel_not_Radical
(75) wrote:
~i'd say it came from an interesting conversation with somebody eh? *cough* girls *cough*...*cough* jules is finally in love *cough*...very cool write man
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, blue
(1409) wrote:
not a poet? rediculous, it was the reader who fell short. ~b
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
I realy liked this write aswell. It has perspective
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, elisa
(1595) wrote:
...the inconceivable ..manifested....truly a boundless scenario...very nice.
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, mozarts cat
(183) wrote:
gods, this reminds me of so much ..
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On Sunday, October 1, 2006, Anth
(1126) wrote:
it too reminded me of much, like a glimpse of all thats been missing , a truly beautiful encapsulating write