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Funeral Flowers
By monalisamarie
I lived my like and so I failed
From a gunshot shattered nail
Hither all to run and hide
And keep a date with suicide
Beauty walks with broken stride
Hammer knife through Beauty’s lie
Still alive but all too pale
Funeral flowers far too frail
Ripping open sewn lip seam
Like a prism rattled scream
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© 2006 monalisamarie
Comments on "Funeral Flowers"
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A former member wrote:
Left me breathless ...now THAT is raw talent.
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On Friday, September 8, 2006, insideout
(47)
wrote:
gave me breath
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On Friday, September 8, 2006, insideout
(47) wrote:
i love it
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On Sunday, May 7, 2006, mywristshurt
(408) wrote:
damn... you got some talent
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On Monday, April 10, 2006, Equinox Asylum
(140) wrote:
I would leave an orchid, but your words are so alive.
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On Monday, March 6, 2006, ShardsofSilence
(222) wrote:
brilliantly genius.
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On Monday, March 6, 2006, Doc
(145) wrote:
damn... you may be the new first new person, in a looong time, to enter this society with something worth reading. The rhyme is what makes it. Doc
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On Sunday, March 5, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(564) wrote:
I agree with Mike...I loved it; it was nicely put together and made heartbroken beats sense
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On Sunday, March 5, 2006, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
My god... I'm never - NEVER - this excited about a rhyme/structered poem. But this... This was something special. Beautifuly crafted couplets that just flow. FLOW. and your content was breathtaking. Welcome to DP. With a vengance.
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On Sunday, March 5, 2006, monalisamarie
(113) wrote:
*btw...I meant for the first line to be like..but I may just change it...life is rather nice in this place*
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On Sunday, March 5, 2006, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
Just one piece of criticism and then I'll shut up. I could be wrong about this but I think you meant "Life" in the first line. Not "Like". Otherwise, this was perfect.
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