Smoke Vision
By veingo
They drift quickly, yet silently.
The thoughts. (smoke visions)
Like the pictures you can sometimes pick out
in the smoke of a campfire, or a cigarette.
Damn this house.
Too bright in the day to be a comeforting cave,
too empty at night to be a home.
And why, would any fool come here?
For a love fleeting,
that fled, as soon as the roots dug in.
And I uprooted three angels to come here.
And in God's name tell me,
who put me in charge of angels anyway?
(smoke vision)
Oh, right.
That was my idea wasn't it?
What used to be, is now debries.
Shreded shards of memories.
And my photo album?
What have you done to it?
I keep my heart in there!
(smoke vision)
You chill me to the bone,
and yet you blister my soal.
It's all I can do, not to love you anymore.
And how will I fix it all?
For me?
For my photo album, and my heart?
And for my angels?
I guess,
just keep watching the smoke,
(smoke vision)
for clues.
Comments on "Smoke Vision"
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On Friday, December 28, 2007, italianbella
(183) wrote:
remarkable excellent work from you:)
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On Tuesday, January 24, 2006, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
this was like watching the last roses surrender to frost slowly, so solemn and sad, delicate aching. great ending lines....
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A former member wrote:
wow, very moving, for some reason I feel like I can relate very closely with your work... lemme know what you find in that smoke, cause I'm just burnt. I love the discription of the house (reminds me of a line from a Floyd tune)
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A former member wrote:
i came back to this..the struggle in this is just so eloquently weaved and punctured.."And in God's name tell me,
who put me in charge of angels anyway?"
gods, i adored that line. ♥
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A former member wrote:
beautiful. this is poetically perfect and quite chilling.
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On Thursday, October 20, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy
(357) wrote:
crypic... mournful... tantalising...
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On Thursday, October 20, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy
(357) wrote:
*sucks down a huge bongful of smoke* ... *exhales the deliciously toxic brew* ... there's beauty to be found in the patterned chaos when you are willing to look
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A former member wrote:
Wow.... your words haunt me in a way that is not unpleasant,
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On Saturday, October 15, 2005, darkscarecrow
(2) wrote:
wow, you really let it pour out in this one. It kind of feels like you are yelling at someone in this one.
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A former member wrote:
From what use to be/is now debris/Shreded shards of memories all the way down to for my photo album/and my heart hits me so hard! This is a great piece! Beautiful write!
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On Friday, October 14, 2005, Army Barbie
(316) wrote:
"And in God's name tell me, who put me in charge of angles anyway? (smoke vision) Oh,right. That was my idea wasn't it?" Oh I absolutely adore this piece.
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On Friday, October 14, 2005, Err0r
(358) wrote:
Each line left me stifled and in awe. This was truly an amazing piece.
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A former member wrote:
"It's all I can do, not to love you anymore." You have spoken volumes of foreign language to my soul, and yet I have understood every word thus far. Yet another beautiful masterpiece from your lovely mind. *Evangel*