Gold

By Dr Benway

Sorry for not posting anything in so long, we had a really bad fire in the appartment building I moved into, so I was kinda homeless, and without a computer for awhile.

Anyway, this is something I wrote while hitch-hiking, in the back seat with a driver that didn't speak English, all he did was offer me a paper and pencil. Sorry if the grammar is off, I am tired and couldn't be arsed to fix it.
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You asked me to build your alter, your shrine in broken times.
For you I became an alter. Your guide with steady eyes.
And yet I never told you, This shrine was built for two

I remember the first time you prayed before me,
demanding of forgiveness, hopeful for your soul.
I was eager to kiss your worried lips,
washing you of all your fears.
You touched my face and thanked me.

All I ever wanted, was to be your salvation.

I remember the second time you prayed before me,
asking for compassion, grasping at last hopes.
With firm hands I assured you, wiping his sweat from your chest,
restoring you to innocence.
You fell asleep in my arms.

All I ever wanted, was to be your salvation.

I remember the third time you prayed before me,
crying out for closure, desperate for new beginnings.
I whispered in your ear that I would always protect you.
I cleaned their blood from your shirt,
to help you find your pride.
You spoke of us and futures bright.

All ever wanted was to be your salvation.



Yes my dear, I was quite happy,
so content to be your light.
I would of given always, just to keep you strong and safe.

Then, in my time of weakness, within a fall from grace.
I returned to find the alter cold, to find your faith in me had died.



I remember the first time I prayed to you, pleading for your passion, so needing of your trust.
You handed me a letter, in it words of your goodbye. You striped the alter of it's Gold, and left it out to die.

I see now, you never wanted the salvation that you held.


I guess I should of told you, this shrine was build for two
All I ever wanted, was for our prayers to see us through...

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Copyright 2005 Dr Benway
Published on Wednesday, September 28, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Kittykat On Tuesday, April 6, 2010, Kittykat (35)By person wrote:

    Very beautiful, wonderful, loved every word, every time I read this I am moved by the intensity.

  • Sticky Kitty On Monday, October 17, 2005, Sticky Kitty (242)By person wrote:

    dear god...im crying. words cant do this justice. It's absoloutly beautiful. jesus christ...im stunned. -kitty

  • Philla On Friday, September 30, 2005, Philla (95)By person wrote:

    This is so heartbreakingly wonderful. This made me want to cry the most lovely words and leave them here for you... -*Philla*-

  • A former member wrote: the dedication and terrible sense of loss in this overcomes me. your words hit so powerfully, i was completely lost in this even after i finished reading it. ....-samone

  • AniDayz On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, AniDayz (820)By person wrote:

    this reads different than your other pieces...though just as captivating, just in a different way. intensely heartshattering and beautifully composed...it speaks in volumes like no other..i had vivid images running through my mind reading this.

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Me and you. We see things the same, just set the letters in different orders to say what we mean. Man...this, this is like any of your other works. I feel it a little too much, and I'm left wishing that I didn't. That I could pretend I'm only reading and

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    *not feeling. If there's anyone that understands me better, or that I understand better, show them to me. I think that we were spawned from the same cell, man.

  • The Crimson Queen On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, The Crimson Queen (918)By person wrote:

    Strong words to break my already fragile heart. But simply to see your name in the poetry list brings a smile to my face. We've missed you sweetie!!! xoxo

  • Elegant Kiss On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Elegant Kiss (182)By person wrote:

    Aha! You posted.. Eee. That makes my whole month. I pictured you reading this, not a loud, but in your head. It was heartfelt and tragic..

  • Elegant Kiss On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Elegant Kiss (182)By person wrote:

    You always tug and pluck at my heart chords. You're the emotional voice I wish I had. I'm so glad you're safe and pray that you are well.

  • Elegant Kiss On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Elegant Kiss (182)By person wrote:

    I read this at least 6 times before I decided to comment.. Weighing heavy on my chest, your regret. gods, I've missed you something awful. The last two lines are beyond beautiful. I miss you. Thank you.

  • Err0r On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Err0r (365)By person wrote:

    One could only wish to have half the talent you just shared in such an exquisite poem.

  • A former member wrote: Absolutely heartbreaking, you are gold!

  • Dr Benway On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Dr Benway (48)By person wrote:

    ya, everything I do is rough. I am not one of those people that thinks it's wrong to edit a poem, but if I were to edit all the grammer/spelling etc. Errors, I would over heat my computer with the spell checker. :)

  • Crysa On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Crysa (33)By person wrote:

    I really enjoyed this, it is a little rough, but I love it. The content and the religious like idea...brilliant I say!

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