Gold
By Dr Benway
Sorry for not posting anything in so long, we had a really bad fire in
the appartment building I moved into, so I was kinda homeless, and without
a computer for awhile.
Anyway, this is something I wrote while hitch-hiking, in the back seat
with a driver that didn't speak English, all he did was offer me a paper
and pencil. Sorry if the grammar is off, I am tired and couldn't be arsed
to fix it.
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You asked me to build your alter, your shrine in broken times.
For you I became an alter. Your guide with steady eyes.
And yet I never told you, This shrine was built for two
I remember the first time you prayed before me,
demanding of forgiveness, hopeful for your soul.
I was eager to kiss your worried lips,
washing you of all your fears.
You touched my face and thanked me.
All I ever wanted, was to be your salvation.
I remember the second time you prayed before me,
asking for compassion, grasping at last hopes.
With firm hands I assured you, wiping his sweat from your chest,
restoring you to innocence.
You fell asleep in my arms.
All I ever wanted, was to be your salvation.
I remember the third time you prayed before me,
crying out for closure, desperate for new beginnings.
I whispered in your ear that I would always protect you.
I cleaned their blood from your shirt,
to help you find your pride.
You spoke of us and futures bright.
All ever wanted was to be your salvation.
Yes my dear, I was quite happy,
so content to be your light.
I would of given always, just to keep you strong and safe.
Then, in my time of weakness, within a fall from grace.
I returned to find the alter cold, to find your faith in me had died.
I remember the first time I prayed to you, pleading for your passion, so
needing of your trust.
You handed me a letter, in it words of your goodbye. You striped the alter
of it's Gold, and left it out to die.
I see now, you never wanted the salvation that you held.
I guess I should of told you, this shrine was build for two
All I ever wanted, was for our prayers to see us through...
Awards
Comments on "Gold"
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On Tuesday, April 6, 2010, Kittykat
(35) wrote:
Very beautiful, wonderful, loved every word, every time I read this I am moved by the intensity.
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On Monday, October 17, 2005, Sticky Kitty
(241) wrote:
dear god...im crying. words cant do this justice. It's absoloutly beautiful. jesus christ...im stunned. -kitty
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On Friday, September 30, 2005, Philla
(95) wrote:
This is so heartbreakingly wonderful. This made me want to cry the most lovely words and leave them here for you... -*Philla*-
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A former member wrote:
the dedication and terrible sense of loss in this overcomes me. your words hit so powerfully, i was completely lost in this even after i finished reading it. ....-samone
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
this reads different than your other pieces...though just as captivating, just in a different way. intensely heartshattering and beautifully composed...it speaks in volumes like no other..i had vivid images running through my mind reading this.
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
Me and you. We see things the same, just set the letters in different orders to say what we mean. Man...this, this is like any of your other works. I feel it a little too much, and I'm left wishing that I didn't. That I could pretend I'm only reading and
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
*not feeling. If there's anyone that understands me better, or that I understand better, show them to me. I think that we were spawned from the same cell, man.
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(917) wrote:
Strong words to break my already fragile heart. But simply to see your name in the poetry list brings a smile to my face. We've missed you sweetie!!! xoxo
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Elegant Kiss
(178) wrote:
Aha! You posted.. Eee. That makes my whole month. I pictured you reading this, not a loud, but in your head. It was heartfelt and tragic..
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Elegant Kiss
(178) wrote:
You always tug and pluck at my heart chords. You're the emotional voice I wish I had. I'm so glad you're safe and pray that you are well.
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Elegant Kiss
(178) wrote:
I read this at least 6 times before I decided to comment.. Weighing heavy on my chest, your regret. gods, I've missed you something awful. The last two lines are beyond beautiful. I miss you. Thank you.
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Err0r
(358) wrote:
One could only wish to have half the talent you just shared in such an exquisite poem.
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A former member wrote:
Absolutely heartbreaking, you are gold!
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Dr Benway
(48) wrote:
ya, everything I do is rough. I am not one of those people that thinks it's wrong to edit a poem, but if I were to edit all the grammer/spelling etc. Errors, I would over heat my computer with the spell checker. :)
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On Wednesday, September 28, 2005, Crysa
(33) wrote:
I really enjoyed this, it is a little rough, but I love it. The content and the religious like idea...brilliant I say!