Hell's Concern

By Stormcomin

Sodden in sweat,
is the trav'ler in debt
In a nightmare he rides to Perdition
Through fields set ablaze
As he silently prays
To a God that requires submission

A foreigner forever forlorn
A native, creative of scorn

A well-worn path
grooved by doom, or by wrath
with no rearview illusion to blind him
in carriage he rides
and in rhythm, he strides
there's no turning back what's behind him

Unnamable, blameable aims
Just malignant, figments of shames

He cries inside
For some place, where to hide
As the gates of damnation tell "Enter"
His eyes form a scream
For this isn't a dream
And "He" hears not the sudden repenter

From journey, now learn he to burn
In dire, a fiery turn

Expelled and compelled into Hell's concern

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Copyright 2004 Stormcomin
Published on Tuesday, November 9, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • MikeShank1989 On Saturday, August 25, 2012, MikeShank1989 (92)By person wrote:

    Your flow is immaculate sir. Perfect cadence.

  • AniDayz On Saturday, March 5, 2005, AniDayz (812)By person wrote:

    mind blowing indeed...wow. the flow is just amazing...pulling me in and in to this...striking.

  • A former member wrote: Mind Blowing.......

  • A former member wrote: I really enjoyed this and your rhyme scheme is very well done!

  • purr_verse On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    this is excellent; i can't help but hear music behind it. Cre's right - your rhyme scheme again is immaculate... the "From journey..." couplet outstanding. Great stuff.

  • cre On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, cre (410)By person wrote:

    I really enjoy reading you. Again, great job on the rhyme scheme and what a story you tell. Well done.

  • stuart_pid On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, stuart_pid (135)By person wrote:

    this is my favorite of yours so far.

  • Butterfly On Tuesday, November 9, 2004, Butterfly (99)By person wrote:

    Wow this was really cool. I love the the aabaab scheme. It just sounds awesome and flows so nice. Good write.

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