Hell's Concern
By Stormcomin
Sodden in sweat,
is the trav'ler in debt
In a nightmare he rides to Perdition
Through fields set ablaze
As he silently prays
To a God that requires submission
A foreigner forever forlorn
A native, creative of scorn
A well-worn path
grooved by doom, or by wrath
with no rearview illusion to blind him
in carriage he rides
and in rhythm, he strides
there's no turning back what's behind him
Unnamable, blameable aims
Just malignant, figments of shames
He cries inside
For some place, where to hide
As the gates of damnation tell "Enter"
His eyes form a scream
For this isn't a dream
And "He" hears not the sudden repenter
From journey, now learn he to burn
In dire, a fiery turn
Expelled and compelled into Hell's concern
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Copyright 2004 Stormcomin
Published on Tuesday, November 9, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Hell's Concern"
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On Saturday, August 25, 2012, MikeShank1989
(92) wrote:
Your flow is immaculate sir. Perfect cadence.
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On Saturday, March 5, 2005, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
mind blowing indeed...wow. the flow is just amazing...pulling me in and in to this...striking.
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A former member wrote:
Mind Blowing.......
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A former member wrote:
I really enjoyed this and your rhyme scheme is very well done!
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On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
this is excellent; i can't help but hear music behind it. Cre's right - your rhyme scheme again is immaculate... the "From journey..." couplet outstanding. Great stuff.
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On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, cre
(410) wrote:
I really enjoy reading you. Again, great job on the rhyme scheme and what a story you tell. Well done.
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On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, stuart_pid
(135) wrote:
this is my favorite of yours so far.
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On Tuesday, November 9, 2004, Butterfly
(99) wrote:
Wow this was really cool. I love the the aabaab scheme. It just sounds awesome and flows so nice. Good write.