The Box
By stuart_pid
He separated day and night,
created space and earth.
And when he saw that it was good
to man he then gave birth.
He then began to build a box
(though why was not quite clear)
with boards created out of doubt
and nails made from fear.
So now this being known as God
was filled with joy and pride,
and on completion of the box
placed everything inside.
For years the men have lived contently
trapped inside the box.
The freedom of their souls is sealed
with solid iron locks.
Their thoughts are only echoes
bouncing off the wooden walls,
while pushed and pulled by puppet strings
like little wooden dolls.
Doomed were we, eternally,
to live a lie out faithfully.
Until we see that finally
a simple man had broken free.
Seeing clear, becomes aware
and looks into his greatest fear.
Through blurry tears he sadly stares
as God almighty disappears.
He saw the sea, he saw the land,
He saw the things from which we're banned.
He then began to understand.
The box he saw was built by man.
So now he wanders day and night
outside the box consumed by fright
and those inside can't see his light.
The boxes sides are sealed tight.
They search and search inside their minds
for something that they'll never find.
The darkness where they've been confined
has only served to make them blind.
They search and search inside their souls
but find they're mostly made of holes.
The world in which they've no control
will soon begin to take it's toll.
The man he cried to those inside
until the day in which he died
but they denied the man outside
and never heard him. Never tried.
They closed their ears and closed their minds
whenever he would knock
and happily they lived
inside their little wooden box.
Comments on "The Box"
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A former member wrote:
You write like silk. The words flow so effortlessly and softly, but the truths revealed in your poetry is still strong enough to strangle.
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On Monday, December 10, 2007, Taunting The Reaper
(169) wrote:
This evolves so very perfectly and is laden with truths. Excellent!
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On Tuesday, November 6, 2007, Circe Avalon
(115) wrote:
This poem is one of the best I've read in a long time.....Very good, tre` bein!
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A former member wrote:
Yet another great one I can't believe I missed..
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On Sunday, April 17, 2005, Kinkypoptart
(555) wrote:
Such an amazing image you build with your words. pure talent ~*~Tart~*~
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On Wednesday, April 13, 2005, so_skeevy
(64) wrote:
That was brilliant. I love it.
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On Tuesday, February 1, 2005, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
different style to this, i really liked it. the boards of doubt and nails of fear really drew me in. closed minds will be the downfall of mankind for sure
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A former member wrote:
Just, wow..wonderfully written - Rose
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On Tuesday, November 30, 2004, Savannah
(218) wrote:
I read this poem a long time ago, and I have thought about it several times since I have been back, but I didn't know the name. I am so glad that you posted it. It's just as wonderful as I remember..
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A former member wrote:
This was very fresh and original. I liked the way the rhyme scheme changed toward the middle and then slowed for the last two lines, gave it a very heart racing feel. ~Ship!
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On Saturday, November 20, 2004, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
the concept behind this is just unreal, I love it.... and your constuction of the piece is masterful and complete.... you've filled what you seemed to have set out to achieve in this, without leaving any gaps which is rarely accomplished (in my view). Tha
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On Saturday, November 20, 2004, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
Thank you for such an awesome write. Just brilliant.
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A former member wrote:
This is quite possibly the greatest contribution to litterature I have ever read. Congradulations, you've impressed me.
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On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, Stormcomin
(32) wrote:
Stunning! This is a magnificent work of art.
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On Sunday, October 24, 2004, yslehc
(334) wrote:
OH man i love it! you're a genius lol!!
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A former member wrote:
..talk about brain food...*ponders*
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A former member wrote:
holy crap man, this one surprised me. didn't see that coming. I put welcome to dp on my other comment, but seems your an oldie. welcome back, i look forward to more.
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A former member wrote:
out of all the poems i have read this is one of my favorite
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On Friday, September 10, 2004, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
This was my favorite poem from the old DP. So glad you are back. The light of God was meant to illuminate the world not blind one from it. Sadly, too much light and darkness achieve the same result, blindness. Welcome back. S.
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A former member wrote:
beautiful