Death of the Condemned
By Lord Kalgalath
sliding slowly
a silibant whisper of promised peace
wrapping 'round my neck
this loathsome coil
-silence me-
tie a knot
long sleek and tight
affix the other end securely
it has to hold for the stop
-after the drop-
see the crowd gather
see them all stare
brought the kids i see
picnic stuff too
-hell awaits-
a spectacle
is this all i am
amusement for the masses
dinner theatre?
-don the black hood-
walking outside
the cheers and the jeers
a childs wide eyed stare
this evil must die
-mount the steps-
look around at this world
so cold and heartless
the sands of time, for me
have just run low
-feel the door creak-
the people all watch in silence
the hood goes on
then the noose
heavy assurance of death
-reading out the crimes-
the crowd loves it
like football sunday
rise up and cheer
to see a man die
-pull the lever-
a swift drop
the rope snaps taut
the man gasps his final breath
though the rope and hood
-he is still-
they pack up and leave
spectacle over
corpse is thrown in a pit
with so many others
-just another dead body-
Comments on "Death of the Condemned"
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On Saturday, December 11, 2004, Angst Queen
(370) wrote:
The sad thing about this is the truth of it
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A former member wrote:
I liked this but after reading the comments I fell heartless and twisted
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On Thursday, August 26, 2004, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
like the way you structured this. Great imagery and depiction of how heartless humans can be when they're not facing their own death. Great job.
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On Friday, August 20, 2004, Death
(28) wrote:
I agree with Rain, this was like watching a movie in my mind. I love the part where everyone leaves as soon as he's dead.
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On Friday, August 20, 2004, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
I LOVE this peom Devon, people can be cold and to the point huh? but anyways, this was like a movie playing in my mind.... Kya
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On Thursday, August 12, 2004, Dommi
(95) wrote:
wow... very nicely done.. i loved the way you portrayed just how twisted people are. great job.
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On Thursday, August 12, 2004, Deadly Embrace
(41) wrote:
one word.. "amazing" -DE
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A former member wrote:
This is one of those poems that develops in plot as you read, opening the reader to another world as they hasten to move on faster and faster..at least that's how I read it. This was somewhat unpleasant, but very well written. Exceptional.
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On Monday, August 9, 2004, elisa
(1595) wrote:
you would think there would be peace in death but nope...makes me disgusted with the mob who prolly purchased a ticket from 'ticketmaster'. great poem! I understand the view you wrote it from:)
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A former member wrote:
ahhhh tim, where would DP be without your humour. He's right though devon, incredible imagery. The stepping stones in this lead the walker through each peice of this enigmatic puzzle. Great write indeed, intruiging.
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On Monday, August 9, 2004, knightmirror
(426) wrote:
lmao@tim...anyway this was an awesome write.the begining lines just put a noose around your troat.no pun intended.again nice write.****-knight