Dark Poetry Error

By Syn

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Please refer all comments to the depths below.
Her soul departed with just one blow.
The shot rang out but was not heard,
The only thing said, was a single word.
She spoke of "love" and so she died.
Please remember this broken girl tonight.

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Copyright 2004 Syn
Published on Monday, August 2, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: This is really good and powerful. I really like it because with so few lines, it manages to bring out emotion. Bang up job, really ^^

  • Serenity On Saturday, April 15, 2006, Serenity (469)By person wrote:

    This makes me want to cry.

  • Mahakala On Saturday, April 15, 2006, Mahakala (209)By person wrote:

    memories bring tears to my eyes...

  • jestronlyrests On Wednesday, March 29, 2006, jestronlyrests (5)By person wrote:

    This is a really cool (and initially confusing) perspective on "what if" someone in your life were all of a sudden gone or dead. Take nothing for granted!

  • A former member wrote: Wow..... That's amazing. I feel like a friend just died...

  • mysticventures On Monday, August 23, 2004, mysticventures (538)By person wrote:

    Incredible Grand Finale - how bout an encore?

  • Munkey On Monday, August 23, 2004, Munkey (79)By person wrote:

    Thats so deep and darkly beautiful, I feel like I have lost you and it makes me terribly sad...PLEASE DON'T LEAVE ME!!! Keep it dark I love it that way. -Munkey-

  • A former member wrote: wow, that is really deep.

  • DarkWolf On Tuesday, August 3, 2004, DarkWolf (415)By person wrote:

    This one is so short, yet makes me so sad. I feel as if I have lost someone, and I don't even know you. Thank you for sharing your works with us. -Michael

  • DarkWolf On Tuesday, August 3, 2004, DarkWolf (415)By person wrote:

    The last line is the one that really gets me, "please remember this broken girl tonight". Haunting

  • Lifeless On Monday, August 2, 2004, Lifeless (39)By person wrote:

    Wicked cool. I really ejoyed reading this.

  • A former member wrote: I will remember the only way I have known you, thru your works. It has been wonderful to know you.

  • Malice In Wonderland On Monday, August 2, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (987)By person wrote:

    awww, this was awesome, wordless, as tim said kya Scholar

  • Anth On Monday, August 2, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    impacting to say the least

  • Blood of Winter On Monday, August 2, 2004, Blood of Winter (296)By person wrote:

    amazing...

  • Blinded_Tiger On Monday, August 2, 2004, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    A pity, as I found this to appease me plenty, and in the most devious of ways. Time, place and person excluded ...

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