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wounded
By Exodus
And only when I burst
into flames
You will feel your heart crashing down on you.
You will suffocate me. You use me.
I burn like your other wasted enemies.
You didn’t believe. But you tried.
You’d never take the hit.
I was holding on, waiting for the big bang.
Oh, You’re so satisfied with me right now.
And only when you reach for my hand again.
I will watch you die.
Asphyxiate. Broken needles washed up on paradise.
With your pathetic, cold state of being.
Your head will crush beneath your way with me.
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Copyright 2004 Exodus
Published on Thursday, May 27, 2004.
Filed under:
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2004, stormtalk
(729)
wrote:
Mmm, fun rhythym. Choppy, but with a lot of hidden rhymes. I likes it! "Broken needles washed up on paradise" hits home, too... I remember a couple of years ago, I found a hypodermic needle on the beach in front of my house, heh.
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On Tuesday, June 1, 2004, Mr King
(547) wrote:
a powerfully angry piece... repressed suffering of a wounded soul... finding ventilation... i pray you can let it all go, create peace for yourself, and take your own life back...
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On Tuesday, June 1, 2004, Mr King
(547) wrote:
For you can never be free from this terrible devastation committed upon you until you let it out, forgive, take responsibility for your own life, and let it go... that's where your power is... the hate will only harm yourself... ONELOVE, Seth
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On Tuesday, June 1, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti
(341) wrote:
there is definitely a very strong sense of indignation...awesome...-l-
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On Friday, May 28, 2004, Juggalotus
(69) wrote:
Excellent, it makes me believe that all things are created to die, and that when you are used, you can move past it and exact your revenge. There is always hope, and if not, then vengence.
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On Friday, May 28, 2004, Drifter
(268) wrote:
beautiful work Exodus. "Broken needles washed up on paradise" is my favorite line.
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On Friday, May 28, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
I hope your wounds heal soon my dear... it's always sad to step on needles on paradise's beach, even if the destruction can be satisfying...
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On Friday, May 28, 2004, K_Love
(525) wrote:
"Broken needles washed up on paradise. With your pathetic, cold state of being." Each of your words tell a story, of a journey we've been through. Great write. ~Kirsten~
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