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All You Had?
By HeLlSeND
This face grows
So damn cold
When you say
That we’re old
And I hate
To be bold
but why try
when I told
your ass that
we could last
so fuck you
and be gone
I don’t need
You along
When my time
Comes up soon
You’ll be there
In your room
Still wasting
And tasting
And wishing
Dismissing
my love as
ants pissing
on green leaves
of nothing
who believes
in you now.....
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Copyright 2003 HeLlSeND
Published on Monday, September 8, 2003.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "All You Had?"
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On Monday, October 27, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(511)
wrote:
ooo....what a neat texture! Flow was like something out of a night time poetry reading at a 24/7 beatnick coffee shop!!Great poem. ~JMDW~
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On Sunday, October 26, 2003, yslehc
(334) wrote:
wow i love it, reminds me of some song, i dont know which one though lol.. but yep i love how its written all short like that .. i agree with urban too, i love that part "Dismissing my love as ants pissing on green leaves of nothing"
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On Friday, October 24, 2003, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
nuh UH! much with the not sucking! we likes it mutchly mutchly. -B
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A former member wrote:
oh man it was not so smooth as the others but i liked it that way it exspressed your feelings and gave you a taste of bitterness
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A former member wrote:
Damn I really liked the flow and bitterness in this. The rhyme scheme worked really well here. "Dismissing my love as ants pissing on green leaves of nothing" Loved this. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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A former member wrote:
You need to change the name of this too. This is too great of a fuckin write for such a half ass name man. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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On Sunday, October 26, 2003, HeLlSeND
(40) wrote:
better?
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A former member wrote:
There ya go man:p
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