The Great War
By Melancholic VIncent
Clouds of fire light up the night
Birds of iron tear up the sky
A plumage of miscellaneous red and yellow
Rains down nails towards the sky
Gutting delicate steel wings at twelve thousand feet
The “wind of gods” whistles in a tunnel made of red-hot metal
Souls filled with bones, devotion and bombs on the rear
Fell with half-eaten carcasses by ascending projectiles
Pulverizes in smothered screams by deafening explosions
The earth trembles violently like an earthquake
In the horizon apparitions of metal-twisted monsters
Haunt the souls that will be shed in any moment soon
What resembles of roars of fire from a wounded animal
Scream explosive shells at those who were gazing them from afar
Voices of panic are silenced, eyes of horror are blinded
Bodies are melt down, bones shattered
The doors from hell open to greet the dying souls
In a suffocating scorching breath of flames that kiss the filthy sky
Monstrous balloons stealthy descend like ghosts
Projecting a deadly shadow that advances dead-on
Swallowing in fear those that it reaches
Opens a trapdoor showing a vast arsenal
Voluptuous, eccentrically obese and fat
Tons of titanium that dive towards the ground
Clumsily crashing in a screeching bang
Altering the topography of the terrain abruptly crowded with corpses
Corpses that were running in panic and in a sudden flash
Remained static, confusingly calm, of a morbid serenity
They were sleeping in there, scattered in the crumbles and in the streets
The Silence, insightful in his arrogance
Had sit in the midst of them until morning
He wisely knew no one was getting up from there
Author's Note:
The Great War was the definition known to the First World War because there weren't anything like that before, a wrongly titled though since a Second "Great War" was waiting to happen with more devastating effects...Comments on "The Great War"
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A former member wrote:
You showed me this one earlier... i feel again that i have to say just how incredibly this is written. Every detail of the battlefield and its deranging effects coming to its full glory...or disglory.. I loved its depth and its obvious that alot of effort has been put in writing this
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A former member wrote:
A great way of giving image to what most of us can only imagin, very good!
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On Saturday, October 20, 2012, Melancholic VIncent
(428) wrote:
Thanks! This one I think it's especially shocking, cold that runs through the spine
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On Thursday, June 7, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Divine wind is perhaps the literal translation, and a great Chinese fleet of warships was smashed in the last attempted invasion circa 1600's maybe? This was a great write and the style was different but in a good way, with unusual word choices that only added to an other-worldly feel perhaps, cheers and much enjoyed.
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On Friday, June 8, 2012, Melancholic VIncent
(428) wrote:
Thanks for the contribution, i thought i could be a less obvious, instead of calling air planes, i compared it to birds, and instead of tanks, i could call them something different, I tried to name them as people would have named them when they saw them for the first time
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On Thursday, June 7, 2012, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...this is very good, considering that English isn't your mother language. it has a darkly abstract quality to it, & certainly depicts the horror & destructive force of the weapons of war.
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On Thursday, June 7, 2012, Melancholic VIncent
(428) wrote:
Thanks, "winds of god" i think is the translation of kamikaze, so i put it instead of kamikaze, i don't know if it is noticeable. I wanted to show the horror of war as something personal and vividly. Even if i never went to war....