A Staged Rendezvous
By WoundsLikeStars
Curtain
Vivid shape
Give me a view
Glory at your form
Glance at intentions
Do not linger in shadow
Only offer a moment,
dear one
Pale colored flesh screams with light
For a reason to
be defiled, held, and tasted
Fabric, buttons, zippers, clasps; nothing
but instinct
Before hesitation has built her church, plant this pagan
flag
Your mouth, for Christ is my witness, your mouth burns
Searing
moisture burns away trepidatious growth
This, a predestined dance
of deep carnality
Rhythmic tapestry of teeth, sweat, skin
Forbidden
is my simple aphrodisiac
Pain is your filthy requested muse
Something
must release, love
Something must bleed, love
Something must
die, love
Something just broke
Bite, scratch, clench
All
for this offering
This straining
Your refrain
My retreat
Scene
Author's Note:
I've never really tried to put any kind of structure or form to my work, but some of you have inspired me to branch out. I hope you enjoy this documentation of unexpected (predestined) meeting.Comments on "A Staged Rendezvous "
-
On Wednesday, November 2, 2011, lupus tenebrae
(860) wrote:
The content fits well with the delicate, yet jutting appearance of a diamond. It reads like a slight nip at the nape of your neck. Wonderful shape poem, not too many of its kind.
-
On Wednesday, November 2, 2011, WoundsLikeStars
(54) wrote:
I sincerely appreciate your encouragement, sir.
-
On Wednesday, November 2, 2011, whisperingwalls
(210) wrote:
I love how you felt the energy wax and wane with the dimensions of the diamond, absolutely beautiful... I felt you talked too much about form in the poem, rather than let it speak for itself, but thats very little criticism, because this piece was brilliant overall.
-
On Wednesday, November 2, 2011, WoundsLikeStars
(54) wrote:
I absolutely appreciate your input. There are times when I say too little and there are just as many times when i try and overexplain myself. Something I need to work on.
-
On Wednesday, November 2, 2011, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
I'm thinkin you may be quite the artist.. Of words and feeling.... I'm glad you are here sir.. And I appreciate your comments...
-
On Wednesday, November 2, 2011, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Quite as good as any I've seen in these here parts pardner; thanks for this exquisite offering.