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Sleeping Willow
By Ladyhawke
Nights on a whispered willow
There's a man singing on my pillow
Of time's cryptic age
Of colors changing seasons
Blooming
in the perplexing reasons
Callous in it's cage
Wisdom
equipes the silent
As monotonous are the violent
So, light
void of sound
Ecstacy's drip from dewdrops
Corrupting
our manevolent crops
Erupting from the ground
Travesty
mimics valor
Decaying the weak with it's pallor
Lo, hope
lies in twilight
For the man on my pillow
Holds the
spirit of the nights willow
He bids me goodnight
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Copyright 2011 Ladyhawke
Published on Thursday, September 1, 2011.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Author's Note:
I wrote this for a dear, dear friend. Wherever he is.......I wish he was singing on my pillowAwards
Comments on "Sleeping Willow"
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A former member wrote:
Another Impressive write curved with Enigmatic Brilliance. This is definitely for keeps.
My Lady
Thank you
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A former member wrote:
So beautiful....
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On Sunday, September 4, 2011, TyrantAvDetForbannet
(274)
wrote:
Ohh wonerful write, your writing is flourishing!
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On Thursday, September 1, 2011, Fantecstasy
(122) wrote:
Depends what you're going for. I've been told that an even number of syllables per line sounds more organic / folksy / rhythmic than an odd number of syllables (i.e your 7/9/5 scheme) which is often more pensive. It's good, and I enjoyed it, but it's hard to know what to suggest to you without knowing what you don't like about it specifically... Anyways, good work again *tips hat*
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On Thursday, September 1, 2011, Ladyhawke
(394) wrote:
If you wanna know the truth, i only went with the 7/9/5 because of the first stanza. I came up with that in an instant, and just went from there. I kinda dont like the 4th stanza. Doesnt hit me as hard. Idk. I'll play with it some. Always a pleasure:)
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A former member wrote:
Wow, your writings are beautiful. You take us through your wonderland, and never miss a beat. You are really good. I want more, my dark princess
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A former member wrote:
The flow of this piece runs like liquid with the highest viscosity possible. Also, the sensuality adds a really nice...echo. Its great!
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