Waiting Azalea

By A Life Without You

.







…she walked to her window and looked down into the street, the lights in the distance looked like wondering stars shinning through the leaves in the trees…


…he was pedaling as fast as he could, today the shades of gray on her face were darker than normal and he swore he would…


…she opened the window just enough to let in a small breeze, she walked back to the bathroom to start the water; this will be the last night she’s…


…he turned the corner - he was almost there, it's as if he could feel her heart beat through the cold dense air…


…she slid into the bathtub with her clothes on, the taste of tears touched her lips as the water swirled around…


…he threw his bike down on the lawn and unhooked the radio from the handle bars… she only wanted to feel safe, wrapped in someone’s arms…


…gripping the radio, he pressed play and pushed it into the sky… -the blade was soft against her skin as she slowly closed her eyes…






...she heard a familiar song in the distance...









...disapear into the night...







.

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Copyright 2010 A Life Without You
Published on Thursday, May 6, 2010.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • AtlaS On Thursday, July 1, 2010, AtlaS (49)By person wrote:

    deliciously tragic. i liked this one man awesome write

  • A former member wrote: very smooth.... the fragmented narrative is effective..... allows for greater audience participation... engaging..... one thing: "close on".... I think you meant "clothes on"?

  • A former member wrote: Is the title also the title of the song... perhaps? That would be a neat.

  • A former member wrote: You're so creative

  • Dei On Monday, May 17, 2010, Dei (663)By person wrote:

    So tragic, i love the choppy style. Really keeps you in suspense.

  • A former member wrote: wow.... this was very unexpected, I did not see it coming at all.. so thought-provoking and painful.. I hung on the edge of every word, astounding..

  • Shortnlethal On Wednesday, May 12, 2010, Shortnlethal (65)By person wrote:

    wonderful wording ^^

  • A former member wrote: I agree with DV... beautifully haunting. =)

  • Dilated View On Friday, May 7, 2010, Dilated View (582)By person wrote:

    I found this mesmerizing and calculated. Even expecting the outcome I didn't expect it to be so haunting. The words unspoken, I think, added much to this. Nicely done, thank you for sharing :)

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