A Requiem For An Outlaw

By Malcholm Dark

In the stillness of life,  a soul drowns in strife
  Stop that hammering outside I implore!
But as night becomes day, a ringing echoes my way
  So I move toward the jail-house door.
Is that singing I hear, so angelic, so clear?
  I lean a bit closer to make sure.
But a clack of the lock,  reveals a priest in frock
  My last meal is then set on the floor.
 

"Preacher!"  said I.  "Tell the truth, do not lie
  On this day will your god be appeased?"
With a shake of his head, these somber words he said
  "I am sorry, he will be quite displeased."
And with time growing short, I take one last snort
  From the bottle between my knees.
There are no regrets as I take those thirteen steps
  To the top of the scaffold with ease.


My eyes are now cast on the people who've amassed
  Many had made the long haul.
With the trapdoor set, a rope around my neck
  I await the hangman's call.
Weighted sacks at my feet and a singing so sweet 
  I stand on the scaffold tall.
Once an outlaw at large, I now make one last charge
  With the snap of my neck, I fall!


"Yes we shall gather at the river
the beautiful, the beautiful river.
Gather with your neighbors at the river
as I make my way unto God..." 



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Copyright 2010 Malcholm Dark
Published on Wednesday, February 3, 2010.     Filed under: "Reflective" and "Poetry"
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  • lupus tenebrae On Friday, June 4, 2010, lupus tenebrae (860)By person wrote:

    An incredible write, I felt like I was walking alongside this outlaw all the way to the gallows, well done, thanks for sharing. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: I feel you were following The Raven well done Malcholm. Scholar

  • jonLyndon On Friday, May 21, 2010, jonLyndon (113)By person wrote:

    Very good, almost perfect meter & rhyme; the poem flows as a river & the story unfolds well. Many splendid lines, so I'll mention a couple/few I think need slight change: "a rope around my neck" I'd simply change 'around' to 'round; I feel it would not just work just slightly better, but also captures the Outlaw feel. I'm a bit confused w/ the "snort" from the bottle; feels yer stretching a bit w/ that line for meter. Is the outlaw's hands tied w/ a bottle of wine between his knees which he breathes in? I understand he is a prisoner on his way to the gallows, but even a Preacher would help him to have a final drink. Small critique, it does not alter the overall affect. The final line in the penultimate stanza: he'd have to fall first before his neck would snap: maybe "with the drop the snap! I fall"? Not the best suggestion, I know this poem needs to keep a flawless meter & make sense. Been a long time since I've writ a poem in this style. It's very difficult to do & no one does it better than Poe. Not even the Bard. I like how the final stanza changes meter from the rest of the format and 'God' has the same feel/flow as 'fall', which is odd in metaphor. All that written, this is a very well composed poem; I am tempted to give it a 10, but will snap a 9 (I rarely ever give a 10 as it is). Just a few bits, but still, you are working with a very difficult format. 9.5 if I could. Cheers!

  • Malcholm Dark On Friday, March 30, 2012, Malcholm Dark (806)By person wrote:

    Snort is an old metaphor for s short sip or quick drink... usually dealing with whiskey or hard liquor... thanks for the comments, much appreciated...

  • jonLyndon On Friday, May 21, 2010, jonLyndon (113)By person wrote:

    Heh! Glad Deaths Apostle caught the small typo before I read this; those things just happen. Every good writer needs a good editor. EGWNAGE - we ALL make typos, but it's cool he pointed that out for you.

  • Deaths Apostle On Sunday, March 21, 2010, Deaths Apostle (65)By person wrote:

    Again, amazing write...Check out the second stanza though, I believe you meant to say 'your' instead of 'you'

  • Malcholm Dark On Wednesday, April 14, 2010, Malcholm Dark (806)By person wrote:

    thanks for the word, I read, I miss, it happens... An outside reader is what we all need at times, thank-you....

  • A former member wrote: Once again you have amazed me.

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