Air

By sixsixnine

I hear the water
crashing down on me
while holding my ears shut
I hear the secrets of the waves
screaming for all my attention

I feel the vibration
of the open clock
the open lock
look at me
and reveal
what my attention
has manifested

and I have swam through
the pools of rotting flesh
from the thought that perhaps
this is the best, that I could do
and ran right into you

now we are one

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© 2009 sixsixnine matthew parkey II
Published on Thursday, May 14, 2009.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • TropicalSnowstorm On Friday, November 18, 2011, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    "I hear the secrets of the waves screaming for all my attention" - nice! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Leith Plunkett On Sunday, May 17, 2009, Leith Plunkett (237)By person wrote:

    Fantastic. I love the first stanza. I also look at it as though you have become one within yourself for better or for worse, an acceptance of sorts.

  • A former member wrote: really enjoyed the rhythm of this entry. Especially enjoyed in the middle with the ending on stressed syllables for like four lines. Very strong. I like it.

  • A former member wrote: i have a similiar take on this as Mylissa,..yet i feel in this you've written yourself as a person that doesnt deserve alot so thats the type of person youve settled with,..like a self surrender of character,...i deserve as good as i give...?...

  • urbanhumility On Friday, May 15, 2009, urbanhumility (1158)By person wrote:

    your imagery and verse reach far my friend........well done...................urban

  • A former member wrote: it felt like I hit the hard soggy bottom of a watery grave...yes, some air would be nice.

  • A former member wrote: and by that, I mean I liked it a helluva lot :)

  • Mylissa On Thursday, May 14, 2009, Mylissa (825)By person wrote:

    I have to say I read this twice. I feel like you are speaking of dating through some interesting characters and really being bombarded with the attention of not the best people only to finally stop looking. Once this happened you ran directly into the person you were meant to be with all along. At least that is my interpretation, well done :)

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