A Sneeze
By stargaze0991
My love is like a sneeze....
I'll feel it coming,
It'll threaten to overtake,
the tension will build,
then,
relief,
sweet relief,
Concern will then flood me,
Am I falling ill,
will this be a start of an end,
can't I control this phenomenon,
or let it take it's toll,
will it build then die,
or explode me with it's power,
I doubt,
then,
relief,
sweet relief,
Is it nature's way to do this,
Does it happen to everyone,
Then why does all my focus,
become to focused,
all is turned on the inevitable accident,
or is it an accident,
response or fate I wonder,
then,
relief,
sweet relief,
and I hold my hand out in protection,
wondering it its me or them i protect,
so many options,
an elbow for everyone,
a hand for revenge,
confounded, am I, for something which,
can't wait,
then,
relief,
sweet relief,
Now all circumstances have occurred,
and what am I left,
residue of disgust and questions,
I've been pushed by reality,
and didn't hold back,
but I find one thing in the world,
is fleeting,
relief,
sweet relief
Comments on "A Sneeze"
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On Wednesday, March 19, 2008, Swift
(35) wrote:
I loved the comparison here. Clever. The build up to the ending was great, it kept me on the edge. I gotta say, I was holding in a sneeze as I read it :p ~Amber
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On Tuesday, March 18, 2008, elisa
(1595) wrote:
fleeting indeed. i love the anticipatory build up. very creative write :)
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A former member wrote:
*caught a lite sneeze* Sorry..it's what it made me think of...interesting concept, to say the least, and well played with, needs a tiny bit of refining and it would be perfect..and it touches a personal note, for me..