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That girl.
By totaltrip
I am the one with the big brown eyes
The big sad brown eyes
Always with that smile
The smile that makes it easy
The smile that hides those big brown eyes
Those big sad brown eyes.
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© 2007 totaltrip
Published on Saturday, August 18, 2007.
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"Poetry"
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A former member wrote:
One summer evening drunk as hell I left there nearly lifeless. An old man in the corner sang where the water lillies grow, blah blah blah, and I thought about a pair of brown eyes. That waited once for me. Where his brown eyes were waiting. -Close approximation of the Pogues.
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On Sunday, August 19, 2007, Err0r
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wrote:
Interesting. The repetition of words makes a great way of showing importance. I like the simplicity of this write. Very nice. =)
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A former member wrote:
I know that girl, haven't seen her for awhile... my brown-eyed girl... when unsmiling eyes crown her flawless teeth
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A former member wrote:
simple but with good rhythem, like a song...good stuff
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A former member wrote:
"the smile that makes it easy"... i know that smile all to well. *sigh* i see my own in those big brown eyes of yours.
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