Comments by Poetic-Realm
- "This is really great. When my dad passed away I was given some old poems he wrote about me when I was still a baby. I never met my dad at any age that I could have remembered him and we only spoke on the phone a few times before he died, but basically what I am getting at is I was almost able to be near to him for the first time when I read him, and it meant a lot. Save these few words you share, because they do mean a lot to the ones they are about."
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "On being a Dad for a Year" by BetaWolfinVA
- "Been there. Working in a sweatshop, I mean warehouse as a conveyor belt operator aka box tosser. You drive home playing music loud enough so no one can hear your screams and then you get there, chug tap water and make a prison spread so you have enough gmo-fueled energy to wake up the next morning. Terrible. Just fucked."
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "8.20 an hour " by anaksunamun
- "I peered in and now I'm all twisted up about it. A few vague words for every month, encapsulating every bit of sadness and despair that came with it. You need to post more, fuck."
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "everything after:" by hazydaisy
- "A very proper way to express a literal take on the feast for wolves. Id say maybe edit a few of your rhymes, like woods and wolves do not really rhyme, but few words rhyme with wolves so I understand. Maybe switching it from a pack of wolves into a lone wolf, since I think rhyming wolf properly is a little,simpler. The best thing to do though, is to test yourself in making a very rad rhyme scheme for wolves! Good stuff, just needs a little work if you ask me :) a few minutes maximum just smoothing out the wrinkles, ya know?"
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "Haunted Forest, A Feast For Wolves" by Intoxicating Delirium
- "You're so pretty when you're angry. The truth behind it is, fuck I really hope I dont have a daughter either. Having sisters worries me enough. If something were to happen to them I dont know what I would do. Then as a man I have to think, what if this happened to me? What if I had been taken over, stripped of pride and forced into feeling less... Even with my own suit of armor I dont think I could carry on as the same man. I've always been close to strong-willed women and it makes sense to feel I need you around to not only protect, but to be protected by things that may or may not be too hard for me. I admire you, always.... for still being completely beautiful inside and out despite not only this, but so much else that I know has tried to strike you down. You're a savage warrior she-wolf with her cub and im just a hunter who can't pull the trigger. A man who eats those in his path because the hunger to grow and create trumps the hunger to be understood. One day though, I will find where you rest and I will join you there."
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "Reservation of Violence, Tapped" by Maladroit
- "I don't care if it isn't but this is totally about me and it makes me all mushy. On a serious note: play with words like you have in this one. It suits you to add these things together in such a way. The closeness of sounds but thebdistance of meaning is the most striking part about this, of course below the meaning. I love your smartz"
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "Powder Parallels " by Maladroit
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