Comments by TheBardOfBlasphemy
- "...and then you run out of Fucking Space, forcing you to either: a) delete existing poems that new-found friends commented on. b) upgrade your account and don't eat for a few weeks. c) stop posting due to the inherent suckiness of options a&b"
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "P.O.S Sideline Kick." by Possesion
- "...evil weevil scary stroke struck squirming under skin under nails under hair eyelash eyelid STOP'IT'STOP'IT itching deeper then stronger and longer and BREAK'IT'MAKE'IT'STOP spreading and dreading disease easy to imagine breathing ceased easy and simple"
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Addiction scares the shit out of me." by Possesion
- "...the way you've used pro(a)gressive punch.uation was very well done. Not excessive. Just right. I like it as it allows multiple readings... offering two perspectives in one sentence, like."
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Incinerate|Glory" by Possesion
- "wow this is really damned good. The underlying story, the analogy i imagine, is so perfect, so powerful and heartfelt. The angel cannot be killed or even mortally harmed but the ordeal has changed her, made her stronger."
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Incinerate|Glory" by Possesion
- "...i think either shorten them or put them in one group... perhaps a bunch of longer sentences as time slows down at the moment of capture/death..."
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Hell Hounds" by Possesion
- "...i think it can be even better, however... more work can be done on the flow of it. There are several long sentences in amongst the short bursts of fear and pain... "
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Hell Hounds" by Possesion
- "i liked the scatter of it... chaos and pain... i've been experimenting with this lately too... sometimes a clouded meaning means more! There was some really shattering imagery in here... hope things get better ;)"
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Whore" by Possesion
