Incinerate|Glory
By Possesion
Winged glory, Label her
an 'Angel'..
But she doesn't beleive in 'God' ..
And the pain of her cruci.fiction,
Burns into the soul..
Flesh searing, Body aching,
Scorching, char broiled,
Burnt to Ash and Cinder.
But her wingspan is 8ft.
So in her innocence.incineration,
She soars without moving,
Until preened feathers curl with heat,
Determination.Will to keep going,
The taunts and jeers, of onlookers..
Throwing stones and flaming arrows.
She won't ever be the same,
As her scarred.marred and imperfect.perfection
Skin is looked upon..
But to 'believers', She is still shrouded,
In winged beauty, as she soars..
So far above the heavens
That her breath is felt on earth,
As the sky implodes into welcoming her
Welcome ice fire of pure innocent exuberance..
But since her incineration,
Those sweet cool tones have changed,
Into a dark heat wave.
She burns a new path.
Comments on "Incinerate|Glory"
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On Sunday, October 2, 2005, blue
(1409) wrote:
puh..puh..powerful! You've an intelligent style of writing for one so young.. my compliments to you. ~b
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On Sunday, October 2, 2005, toy soldier
(26) wrote:
wow, i wish i had that kind of will power. good write. i dig.
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On Tuesday, September 13, 2005, MESUN
(230) wrote:
this makes me think of my own idea, "keep going no matter what." don't let people stop you. wonderful.
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On Tuesday, September 13, 2005, MidSummers Eve
(38) wrote:
New paths are the most fulfilling, but the most traumatic as well. Continue down your path or you'll always ask, "What if...?"...I loved it btw, nicely done.
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On Monday, September 12, 2005, Doc
(143) wrote:
i like the religious undertones, makes me think of small town poetry. The underlying symbolism is mysterious, such that I wish I knew the person being written about better. Very well done.
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On Saturday, September 10, 2005, girlafraid
(479) wrote:
the last line was excellent, it really brought everything together in a seamless way. nice work...
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A former member wrote:
Oh my gosh...this is beautiful in every way...I just...wow, I'm speechless. Amazing piece. *Evangel*
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On Saturday, September 10, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy
(357) wrote:
wow this is really damned good. The underlying story, the analogy i imagine, is so perfect, so powerful and heartfelt. The angel cannot be killed or even mortally harmed but the ordeal has changed her, made her stronger.
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On Saturday, September 10, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy
(357) wrote:
...the way you've used pro(a)gressive punch.uation was very well done. Not excessive. Just right. I like it as it allows multiple readings... offering two perspectives in one sentence, like.
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On Saturday, September 10, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy
(357) wrote:
ah. it's lovely. that's it. "Wafn" (that's how a grade 3 kid spelt wonderful for me once) :)
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On Saturday, September 10, 2005, Possesion
(136) wrote:
..."fuzzy mold like on cheese"...
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On Saturday, September 10, 2005, redtearswhitesnow
(79) wrote:
Nice images on this one.