The breath of my failing walls echo with care, dont move me.
By Possesion
Intro:
Fracture my bones
. Bruise my skin
. Tear open my scars
Let the pain in.:
Pale the sun will grow
dim.
A scene dull with no
hue.
Canvas in black and white
Charcoal.
Black nights; Grey days
. In the same smooth
Repitition
...Blinding beauty is found
in the Ashen ruins of a
great castle of my hope.
...And a putrid scent
Somewhat like decay
from the mote.
Bleak grey sand of the
Beaches of our land
...with a stone of
Black Onyx to guard
with no foes
to attack
but ashes are seldom left
behind by the breeze of
fate.
In the end all that
counts is power...
With a burnt City
and failing bridges
losing forces, no strength
to mention;
. Nor allies to call on
Despair!
For no loving
breath will ease
the sun back
Into my pale skies..
Eyes, Portals to my
Demise
outro..
Frail are the words
you breath with sin
never, no never.
I wont give in.
Comments on "The breath of my failing walls echo with care, dont move me."
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On Monday, October 24, 2005, MidSummers Eve
(38) wrote:
"Eyes, portals to my/Demise" What pain doth this tortured soul feel, under what heel so cruelly ground, To take of pain and make such harmony sound?
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On Monday, October 10, 2005, Doc
(143) wrote:
I like the use of color, it shows no brilliance in it at all, solely bland vague depressing colors. But where do they come from? Do your thoughts and dreams truly lack color?
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A former member wrote:
The imagery in this was absolutely incredible. I especially enjoyed the 3rd stanza. This was very well done. ~Ship!
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On Monday, October 3, 2005, redtearswhitesnow
(79) wrote:
ohh this was very good,alot of color usage here,alot of good images,very descriptive..I felt like i was in the middle of every setting you created.
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A former member wrote:
*sways to the unheard rhythm of your words* You've left me grasping at the straws of my sanity once again dear..."eyes, portals to my demise" If only the eyes could hide our emotions...Beautiful write. *Evangel*
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A former member wrote:
..structured decline..*sigh*..this was delicate, but just subtle enough to be fucking intense..almost like a well-strung nightmare..those are the best kind..that leave you with yourself..
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On Sunday, October 2, 2005, blue
(1409) wrote:
I too enjoyed this very much. the wordings were thoughtful and well chosen, I liked the intro/outro touch too.. all around good work. ~b
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On Sunday, October 2, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy
(357) wrote:
awesome... you really built this well - to the climax of our fated eyes: orbs of grim realisation. I am suitably impressed.
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On Sunday, October 2, 2005, Possesion
(136) wrote:
Glad to suitably impress, dear Bard.
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On Sunday, October 2, 2005, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
this is intensely captivating...bound with a creativity that envelopes my skin in shivers...completely ...