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- ""Now I sit by the window,
the silver growing dull,
keeping watch by the window
for his face." - Excellent! Love this one. Hope he knows what is waiting if he ever comes back... : ) Ciao, T/S"
Posted by TropicalSnowstorm on "Weapon" by Carmina Gitana
- "I heard it said recently (in reference to Mr Cohen), that poetry communicates before it is understood. Communication received.
I have not been on here for a while. I did not realize you had posted yet another amazing poem. Thank you. "
Posted by Stranger on "Weapon" by Carmina Gitana
- "Something about this I'm still trying to figure out, in particular the ending... I love the phrasing about the unloaded gun clucking like a tongue with nothing to say, amusing and pointed... it says everything and nothing... I like much too the ebbing and flowing thru the poem of the gun's luster, I'm guessing much like the ebb and flow of emotions attached to him through the time period... I'm guessing it's been a while since he left, long enough for the tide to rise and fall and rise again... i guess where i've been struggling is the ending, so resolute, so determined, just waiting for him to return to... but there's still a catharsis about it, the gun's already been dulling again... yeah, just struggling because the obvious ending just didnt feel right... everything's already ebbing, already dulling... there's security in the vigilance but it's forced and the cracks are already there..."
Posted by MercyRain on "Weapon" by Carmina Gitana
- "This read like a state of mind. Ready to shoot off, keeping your mind-weapons sharp for battle whether battle was presented or sought. I may be off on that but I enjoyed the way you constructed this. Nicely done :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Weapon" by Carmina Gitana
- "uhuh. this is a rare moment of reading for me, wherein I am literally penetrated by a write, a tingling that runs the entire course of my body... everything about this write is perfectly played out like only an Orphic song could. mmm.. don't look back.. thanks for the buzz! ~b"
Posted by blue on "Come, M'Orpheus" by Carmina Gitana
- "Lessee, what's good? The use of a controlling metaphor that is neither trite nor over-reaching, the reflexive symbolic language that plays into that metaphor, the use of repeated words with different connotative meanings to express the full content of the thought being related, not to mention a good deal of natural speaking/chanting rhythm with added consonance and alliteration to tie it all together. In short; it's a snapshot of a moment of someone's life used to tell a deeper and more useful story, one that relates to human interactions of all kinds, rendered poetically, rather than as a forced rhyme and meter prose cliche. "
Posted by Unknown on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "...constructive criticism consists of letting the author know not only why you didn't care for the write, but what you think could be done to better it...you, my socially impaired friend, sounded more like a three year old throwing a tantrum because someone stole your turn on the playground slide...when your commenting grows up, maybe people will begin to actually respect your feedback...until then, don't expect us to think you're anything but a whiner..."
Posted by SilentStalker on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "Oh, thats funny, you must have heard that on your mothers Tv while she was getting her fat trailerpark ass stuffed by someone who ISNT your daddy, tell me, what part of this poem is AT ALL good?"
Posted by Prophint on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "...I see some pent up anger here...someone got walked in on during their 'me' time, perhaps...? adolescence will do that to ya..."
Posted by SilentStalker on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "ah, look! Societal Droppings... spewing shit-for-brains all over my screen. Sounds like this brainiac is still in the 5th grade. I'll take the comment as indicative of his ability per se and avoid shit-for-brains altogether. Sharon... are you sure the commentator's occupation has some bearing on the validity of the judgment rendered?"
Posted by Unknown on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "funny thing about poetry... about any art harnessing the power of symbolism... it actually requires that the consumer (reader) have at least a modicum of refinement, at least the capability of recognizing what is art and some small semblance of intelligence to interpret the metaphorical meanings. I like the way the question/answer are juxtaposed in the middle... the allegory of the cigarette is divinely developed... and the descriptive insight that makes the mundane novel is textbook. Excellent... ashes to ashes, huh?"
Posted by Unknown on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "And it takes even less talent to leave an insulting comment without any actual reasons for the insults other than "that sucked". As to everyone else commenting, I happen to know a few of them are "paper-published" poets, one of them has interned for a publisher and another is an associate editor, so their judgments are a little more valid than yours. Nice try, though. Maybe next time you can give an actual reason you dislike something, rather than act like a two year old throwing a tantrum."
Posted by Unknown on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "that sucked! It takes absolutely no talent to write a piece of shit like that! Anyone who says this is beautiful or earth shaking, i just watched my dog take a crap, and by your standards that would be fuking incredible! Fuck all of you!"
Posted by Prophint on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "Just got this in my email as the "poem-a-day." It's been awhile since a poem made me log in to comment on it. Excellent work."
Posted by Liz on "Cigarette" by Carmina Gitana
- "I love the sing song aspect of the first half of this. That is why I like Poe so much. Few can pull it off. Sometimes I wonder if you realize exactly how good you are. "
Posted by Stranger on "Sleeping Beauty" by Carmina Gitana
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