Comments by All Members
- "Beautiful words...... Heart felt expressions of celestial bliss gone wrong some how..... The solidity of pain there..... Write On :)"
Posted by theXkevorkian on "Amantes Sunt Amentes" by Dei
- "Amazing write... Nice mellow flow.. Everything gbends very well together and makes for beautiful imagery... Awesome ;) "
Posted by Unknown on "Amantes Sunt Amentes" by Dei
- ""I place memories inside snowflakes that you may never feel alone." I love this line..so simple yet so real. great images and wonderful flow.."
Posted by boneplate on "Amantes Sunt Amentes" by Dei
- "Yeah, I think the sense of the god needing the mortal comes across... with the weeping, and the fourth line... and there is opportunity for interpreting the need, without it becoming to apparent or simply expressed literally... but what if there were more than acts of creation... what if the images that were created by the acts of creation actually told a tale themselves... one that perhaps paralleled the ultimate message of the power of love... or the weakness it creates, either way... just a thought... 2nd level... we have spinning and weeping, placing of memories.. and world creation... but what if the actions could be developed with a relationship and message that accompanied the message expressed on the level of the action.... just some thoughts.... be well shweets!"
Posted by Unknown on "Amantes Sunt Amentes" by Dei
- "excellent.... I like the tone, the patience, the calm and confidence that the voice develops throughout. The imagery is godlike... and harsh... beguiling the reader with the wonder of what it means to be a creator... to be the one who becomes the world of another. Do you want "breathe" in the first line, which seems to be an invocation to the muse? (as you are calling upon yourself, ms. muse) And then I think you want "as" instead of "has" and later on I think you may want "is" instead of "in"...I like how the last line inverts the relationship established through the images developed earlier.... for whoever heard of a god being a fool? And yet... is it not love that makes fools of us all? very nicely crafted.... *bows before goddess of unworldly creation*"
Posted by Unknown on "Amantes Sunt Amentes" by Dei
- "Oh girl...this is GOOD! Woven like a fine cloth that wrapped around my brain. Each line snapping a picture as quick as a professional photo shoot. I love love love "I place memories inside snowflakes that you may never feel alone". See that ball way over there? It was a out-of-the-park home run =)"
Posted by Musik2MyEyes on "Amantes Sunt Amentes" by Dei
- "That was a beautiful write. The feeling are captured so swiftly when portrayed on such a scale. "I spin galaxies with my fingertips". That line reminds me of some graffiti art I've seen."
Posted by Unknown on "Amantes Sunt Amentes" by Dei
- "I read this and I wouldn't say that I didn't flinch because you reached in deep and I felt... and it was good so I'm thanking you now though I don't have the words to tell you how your poem was magic and magic is special."
Posted by Taunting The Reaper on "Some Sort of Lovely (revised)" by Dei
- "emotions unfold into a reminder that too many of us go without a single notice sometimes, a single notice that could make a world of difference, but is simply bypassed by a world that remains isolated by inopportune devices. Much love. Daniel"
Posted by DoctorAsh on "Some Sort of Lovely (revised)" by Dei
- "Paper lady, I thought this write was absolutely beautiful. Sometimes I wish I could reach into writes like this and alter the emotions of the author by somehow wishing that I could have been there to prevent them. But at the same time these particular ..."
Posted by DoctorAsh on "Some Sort of Lovely (revised)" by Dei
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