Comments by All Members
- "The first few lines drew me into a very thought provoking and enjoyable read! A grand illusion indeed."
Posted by Sudos on "Entropy" by Shikiryu
- "Thank you, I think duality is something that metre and rhyme is basically built to express. Like the sun and moon, moon and stars duality is all around. Do you have anything written with the moon as focus? I'd def give it a read"
Posted by Shikiryu on "D5// Magic I See" by Shikiryu
- "I've noticed my poems tend to ramble so I've started experimenting with a less is more concept. You wouldn't believe how long this was at first, 3 pages ha. Thanks for the kind feedback"
Posted by Shikiryu on "D5// Magic I See" by Shikiryu
- "Ending almost where it begins with the paradox of live / die for me. The dying is the easy part. Enjoyed this dark paen to some unusual thoughts. Cheers Shiki, and darkly delicious; while disturbing too - Dan "
Posted by dwells on "Would you live for me//I CAN'T LOVE YOU" by Shikiryu
- "This is quite thought provoking. You’ve taken this to such a high level with a minimal amount of words. Really well done."
Posted by Kaiser Black on "D5// Magic I See" by Shikiryu
- "Interesting concept with the dual outer then inner landscapes, and the concept of experiencing duality with both. I'm drawn to the moon and stars, but the moon especially. I'm also drawn to the lakes, the rivers and the seas. Both outwardly and internally. Very cool piece, Nicely done :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "D5// Magic I See" by Shikiryu
- "I felt that this read almost chaotically, but in a great way. The back and forth where I couldn't really tell if "I" and "you" were many or one, and the same. Or many but one. That's the beauty of it. We are all particles waiting to return to source, maybe to arrive again and contribute to the orchestra. Maybe the things we dislike in others we dislike because they are brethren so we feel like they should know better, like their chaos is disrupting us all as one in this dream that we dream. I thought the concept was really cool and the structure and delivery as well. It's not always easy to look at the positives when there is so much negativity everywhere you look, but I've heard that whatever one focuses on they're sure to find, for better or worse. Nicely done! "
Posted by Dilated View on "Day 1-20,334 // Dream" by Shikiryu
- "A beautiful and tragic poem, the loss of someone, and the love that still lingers. Its very moving and somewhat relateable. Im glad I inspired you and helped you with your writers block. It was a great poem and I cant wait to read more of your works."
Posted by Broken Rose on "Is it better to forget . . . You?" by Shikiryu
- "A smooth flowing choice of words.. I read this out loud to myself and found myself mesmerised by the sound. Very nicely done, I do agree that writers block is somewhat of an annoyance.. We all will experience this sometime during our time.. I sometimes struggle to find the words to describe the way I'm feeling. Or even better yet, finding a suitable name.. For the most simple things are sometimes the hardest. Great job though, I genuinely enjoyed this. "
Posted by Unknown on "I've lost my muse" by Shikiryu
- "there is inspiration in everything..everyday and its usually right in front of us..it's up to us to capture it ..One good way to handle writers block is to try the write for 15mins non stop anything and everything that comes to mind no matter how silly or odd it seems just write it ..at some point something should click somewhere and maybe you can pull apart the diff things you penned down and put it together..I'm not sayin it will work but doesnt hurt to try.. Nicely penned I hate writers block"
Posted by River Lily on "I've lost my muse" by Shikiryu
- "Love can be many things: a fleeting emotion when first meeting someone, an excuse to bear arms against another's cause for the sake of protecting our own, and so on. Hatred is just as tangible and even more so in result to one's love being driven to obsession. A very good read indeed. "
Posted by JayVerael on "Love is Non-Exisistent" by Shikiryu
- "I really hope that some how your feelings change as time goes by, not as specific as I was hoping but, I'm pleasantly dissapointed. Very well done."
Posted by Phalanx on "Inner Truth" by Shikiryu
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