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- ""We don't burn books / we kill librarians"--yeah, that's pretty inspired, right there. This was obviously quite the big deal, but since I missed out on that party, I'm instead dying to know what the title means, 'cus, um, admittedly I've been trying to figure out what the significance of the capitalization represents for awhile, but no luck. So maybe a little birdy will sing a bird song on the subject. Favorite line: "cuz we're infected with the sickness / catch this your mind is now twisted." Just can't resist. But "our skills will never rust / we're sharp enough" is a pretty special one too. You harness those double meanings like a pro--always nodding to a steely finish . . . "
Posted by Unknown on "(Cult)iVAtioN" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "I'm feelin' it. "The reason Vincent Van Gogh refuses to find his ear / this life is a gift and I don't have the receipt." In the midst of the several lines discussing your dry ink pen, it came to my attention as a very objective reader (ahem, objectifying), that you are in fact fixated on leaving your mark. You talk about your crayons, you talk about your intentions to "leave behind no blank-white paste." You are clearly obsessed with writing materials. And I haven't even mentioned the paper heart stained with black ink sin. Though that IS very clever, as it insinuates how very simple it is to take a fragile foundation and mar it with liquid that will permeate it forever . . . until someone nice comes along to bleach it for you with some very strong Oxyclean. I betcha you'd smell that. So "do human senses gather anything more than this?" Yeah. But you have to throw your pennies into the Trevi Fountain, not a well, silly. Then you'll hear the splash :)"
Posted by Unknown on "Air-Conditioned Hell" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "No, this is my favorite one. In the sixth line, you use 'hasn't' versus 'hadn't'--present tense, which implies something sinister . . . You never cease to impress me with your crafty ways of capitalization . . . everything here holds a hidden meaning; this is truly a masterpiece full of carefully devised innuendoes and perfect rhymes. I love the way you can take an idea and mold it so that many different people can relate to it in completely separate ways. This had to have taken you ages to write, but it paid off, because this is really fantastically sewn together and no matter how many times I read it, I'm always picking up on a new detail that you snuck in there somehow. Thinking about each part and dividing them to conquer is very overwhelming to the senses--too much genius in one place at once time, I suppose . . ."
Posted by Unknown on "The Red Queen and The Suicide King" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "This was really awesome. Dr, House in relation to CSI combined with some brand name prescriptions and tied up with your extension cord. I like that. Had to Google ginsu though, so just be glad that you're educating the masses even when you're making light of crazy. Speaking of, that was actually a clever tag . . . seeing as how I took this literally the first time I read it and then scrolled down to see it. "Cracked the ceiling, too / feeling doomed" and "thinking about coming to get you / grabbing a pistol" are some really great uses of alliteration to mix with your rhymes. Wonderful. "
Posted by Unknown on "CSI Porn" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "I'm not sure if you're an actual recreational drug user or just enjoy the metaphor of trying to escape yourself and what you're capable of . . . wherever you have to go, no matter what the consequences are. Maybe it's both. Sometimes I read your stuff and it makes me wonder about you, like what your life's been like. Curiosity killed the cat, I guess :) but we have nine lives. So I'm just going to keep analyzing your flashbacks from the future and try to realize why you pen despair so well..."
Posted by Unknown on "Salvation Led to Solitude" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "Crawling through volcanic ash
reaching up for a glimmer of light
from a sky long abandoned by the stars... dramatic intro. the entire piece is jam packed w/ stunning images from start to finish. And the layering of emotions is reverberating strongly. Keep em' coming, Nar.. :)~ We missed ya. "
Posted by blue angel on "Salvation Led to Solitude" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "So...a little birdy fluttered on over to tell me about his bad case of antisocial personality disorder; and I'm really glad he did. Definitely seeing the chipped caulk I recognize all too well. First stanza and last stanza cut deep, and your flow always gets me, I never know what's coming--but I first found this one a few weeks ago, and I re-read it about six or seven times looking for a skipped beat. "Itching for a fix, deceiving those close...matter of fact, you're high right now." Yeah, babe, you know, when we photograph ourselves in the mirror, the image always reverses . . . . so it takes a real psycho to acknowledge his sins and still not repent. I like your writing a lot; it's pulsing with anger. But it's your unapologetic observations of everything around you that's amazing. Planned impulsivity . . . a character trait to marvel. Ultimate control while you're out of control . . . it makes you special. But then, you know that. "
Posted by Unknown on "Incubus Mentality" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "Wow, amazing work, the poetic flow really hit home to and the rhythm kept it alive and fresh. So color me impressed.Mrk "
Posted by Unknown on "Color Me..." by NarcissusNarcosis
- "Unless that's another carefully thought out part of your master plan to deceive us all! Ha ha. Oh you are so sly ;-) Sarcastic? Really? But it ties in with the other poems I've commented on so perfectly. "
Posted by Unknown on "Incubus Mentality" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "Once again I knew you were talking about yourself before I reached the end. Getting to know you quite well through your writing. cold hearted lier, manipulator and deceiver disguised as a supportive friend. Some how you're so good at your twisted game that others trust you and tell you their secrets but you're only play the game for what you can get out of these people. You have no scencerity. Well that's how you describe yourself to us through your poems. An interesting character to analyse. It's not often that one gets the opportunity to meet a psycho! Haha just kidding. Some of your work is very human as well."
Posted by Unknown on "Incubus Mentality" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "I dug this and like it even more 'cause it pissed people off. I like most everyone that has had their comments removed and I also read works I think stink but who cares, "do you" as the kids say."
Posted by Alchemist on "Sex With A Dictionary!" by NarcissusNarcosis
- "Reading this was an eclipse of reprisal . . . or livid, gracefully sinister ill-will. I'm caught reading your works again and again and again. You capture anger with a butterfly net and tear its wings apart with saws. Your work is meticulous, destructive, charismatic, and ultimately defines your writing as that of the retribution king.
What a fantastic simile: "Christmas sweater making me itch and clinching uncomfortably." Like no one wants her. ". . .fantasizing about taking you're life." At the last breath, I could feel my lungs fill with water. "
Posted by Unknown on "Hold your breath..." by NarcissusNarcosis
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