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- "This is so multi-layered and faceted, more than deserving of the win. I almost feel like the prize amount is so meager compared to the brilliance of this piece. "
Posted by Amaryllis on "A Tanka for Eventide " by cadymae
- ""what will be even as we must let it become what was. " We,too, become what was. I think it is helpful to let that thought inform my days. Balancing on the cusp of non-being with your eyes open allows you to look at life more sweetly. "
Posted by cadymae on "Nothingness, Something, Nothingness" by cadymae
- "Also, if I could elaborate a bit more about that last line.....It could be taken so many different ways...a conclusion with perhaps limitless endings...like a book with multiple endings....a story of love, laughter, loss and violence...awesome write, thank you again!"
Posted by deadmanshand on "A Tanka for Eventide " by cadymae
- "Every time I read this i get more from it, and even though i could describe what you wrote a dozen different ways, none of them would do it justice. For me, I especially like the last line...as if to say after all this love and admiring/worshiping, now I shall eat you bitter-sweetness......a line which I'm not positive it was your intention, but I find very, very humorous in my own dark and twisted mind. And though sad, leaves a very warm feeling in my stomach (no pun intended). This is exactly what I was hoping to see. Thank you for playing! cheers!
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Posted by deadmanshand on "A Tanka for Eventide " by cadymae
- "doesn't one seek to fit many into this outline, this space where happiness is thought to born.... fitting what is into what will be even as we must let it become what was. Even as the khora, the space, the open-ness of what isn't, of what allows for what is to cease once again to be, even as this space consumes every possibility that it provides. maybe. thanks, thoughtful work."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "Nothingness, Something, Nothingness" by cadymae
- "gorgeous depth... alighting upon the sunset... a soul in song, rising evermore with peaceful perch... if only such a roost could be kept, such a call be heard. Thank you."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "A Tanka for Eventide " by cadymae
- "The first stanza is awesome! especially the thought of how many poems a poet doesn't share that they keep locked to there self in fear of it not being good enough. Thank you "
Posted by Cattarax on "Perfectly Imperfect" by cadymae
- "There might be something there after your body dies, but since your wetware, that that is your brain, which holds all your memories and your personality will be rotting in the grave, you won't be aware of what's there. Similar to the way there is a nothingness for a dementia patient when they see what used to be their beloved child."
Posted by cadymae on "Nothingness, Something, Nothingness" by cadymae
- "ya to yer "maybe" regrets are slippery things. and what we base our judgements on as we decide *what* to regret is slippery as well. "
Posted by cadymae on "Yet I'll still regret" by cadymae
- "I almost read 'the skin of the world' .... where the word may be the skin... windeggs... seems this metaphor has been traveling this site lately... I forget which daughter of Zeus was born from his mind... Socrates called himself a 'midwife' in the Theatetus (sp?) ... claiming he gave birth to ideas and pronounced them either truth or windegg... just a thought that came to mind. I like your wordplay, thanks."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1: Birthing a thought" by cadymae
- "you're right. the last line misses. I'm still chewing on it. Was playing with the "e" and s" of gladness and sadnesses. The idea and cadence and the "yets/regrets" are all there though. I'll come back to it. tnx fer reading."
Posted by cadymae on "Yet I'll still regret" by cadymae
- "Great, but the last line was a bit of a let down. Perhaps something like "Yet I watch the bruise take shape" or something better than either one. This was so close,.. thanks."
Posted by dwells on "Yet I'll still regret" by cadymae
- "is it the yet... the not yet... that always brings some form of regret? No matter how much we make of that not yet... when it becomes what it was... what was, yet... it turns into regret. maybe. thanks."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "Yet I'll still regret" by cadymae
- "This was fantastic and the colors took things to another level. A fine line between criticality and meanness perhaps? Thanks and well done."
Posted by dwells on "Eggplant" by cadymae
- "interesting... what had been just said... and was it deflected in the end. When colors are more than what we see. pensively composed, thanks."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "Eggplant" by cadymae
- "the outside has been neglected, maybe... and would be much more welcoming with more of your words, I think. Thank you for sharing."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "Dark moon rising" by cadymae
- "I'm smiling at your screen name. Thanks for reading my words. Until this place, I'd not offered them to the outside. :)"
Posted by cadymae on "Dark moon rising" by cadymae
- "just outside. sometimes I wonder if all I ever really long for is just outside. thank you for the thoughtful words; I've never seen a sunset like this before... I would like to know one someday."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "Dark moon rising" by cadymae
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