Comments by All Members
- "Great Piece... Same thing happened to me and it sucked so bad. Memories that can never be replaced, sorry for your loss"
Posted by Unknown on "Fire, Fire. " by SmuggledOranges
- "this form of abuse hits very close to home. if I could I would wipe out all who abuse and not feel one ounce of remorse. My father died before I could vent poetic justice to the bastard. "
Posted by PoetessDarkly on "Molest" by SmuggledOranges
- "all right I got to stop that.... I am in tears the pour down my cheeks and make my computer hate me. I so love this poem I am definately favoring it. :)"
Posted by PoetessDarkly on "Dear Soldier" by SmuggledOranges
- "Many Have Given Their Life In The Way Of Honor And Brotherhood; Thankfully, Ive Never Felt This Loss. Thank You For The Share.
- The Soldier"
Posted by Chaos God on "Dear Soldier" by SmuggledOranges
- "Very sad. For those non Christians, please forgive this bible quote, but it seems appropriate,
Mark 10:15
Jesus said, “I tell you the truth, anyone who will not receive the kingdom of God like a little child will never enter it.â€
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Posted by Unknown on "Rest In Paradise" by SmuggledOranges
- "A hunting accident perhaps or some other nameless tragedy when kids and firearms mix, so sorry and tragic, thanks for sharing."
Posted by dwells on "Rest In Paradise" by SmuggledOranges
- "I liked this. If your date turns into a competition then you have the wrong partner. Are you happy for your friend or upset that she stole your date? "
Posted by Unknown on "Dancing With You" by SmuggledOranges
- "wow. i understand what you are going through., it was my brother, not a lover. but my brother took care of me most of the time. my mom and dad wasn't around much."
Posted by sexxykiller14 on "Dear Soldier" by SmuggledOranges
- "First things first, you should spell check this a little more thoroughly. Also i think you meant "swiftly" not "siftly". On to the piece itself. I like the concept, and its evident that you're new to writing so this was good for a fresher pen, but its repetitive in parts. I think it could use a little smoothing over. Some of the stanzas were a little forced, less poetic and more like youre just talking, you know? My advice is to maybe shorten it a little, and make it more elegant, it IS about a dance, as brutal as the dance may be, i think it would tie in well if you made it flow a little more. Maybe mix up your word choice some. You have a good foundation, it just needs to be a little less like a dialogue, and more of a show. Just my two cents. "
Posted by Unknown on "Dancing With You" by SmuggledOranges
- "Excellent. The classic struggle with depression and suicide. I hope this isn't personal for you? I prefer poetry like this with good cadence and structure. I look forward to more. Thanks."
Posted by Unknown on "The Art Of Suicide" by SmuggledOranges
- "Good structure and flow; you are the skillful one, thanks. A delicate and dark topic for sure."
Posted by dwells on "Molest" by SmuggledOranges
- "Mmmmmmm... You know In life ... Every day we're alive is one day closer to they're demise... All my best to her..."
Posted by Devilish on "Molest" by SmuggledOranges
- "good job, it had me crying. my bff commited suicide over her bf breaking up with her. it stills hurts even though it was 12 years ago. i get what your going through. just hang strong and live for what she didn't get to!"
Posted by sexxykiller14 on "Killing Two" by SmuggledOranges
- "Such a powerful Eulogy. Whenever I`m in a tight spot, I think of those far inbetween few who mean so much to me, and how it would affect them... Just another reason to keep moving..
This piece was more a short film then a poem, you could see every image in your minds eye.. Great write!"
Posted by whisperingwalls on "Killing Two" by SmuggledOranges
- "well . . . i went down that path, still am on it in a way. but been sober for a bit recently, and honestly, if you're truly thinking about quitting it's not too difficult, but the first week or two is hard (don't give in though!)
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Posted by Unknown on "Smoke" by SmuggledOranges
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