Comments by All Members
- "I was actually pretty impressed by the lack of force in your rhymes, this flowed fairly easily...I don't see that too often anymore. I think I will have to keep my eye on your posts."
Posted by Lydia Jade on "'Till The End" by Foreverlost28
- ""And deep inside it
A storm of black appear
Its nothing you can touch
There is nothing to hear"
This is an dark and appealing line
Your whole piece had a black mastery and magnificence!
Continue Rendering!
"
Posted by Unknown on "Darkness" by Foreverlost28
- "I once felt like this...more than I can ever stress to you. I know I am an ignorant stranger that does not know you or the life you've lead...but I do know pain...pain that comes from nowhere you can pin point.....and I just need you to know that you CAN talk to me if you'd like. I think I could help you."
Posted by Unknown on "Disable Me" by Foreverlost28
- "Why are you filled with so much pain? What makes you hurt? I have suffered a lot....a lot a lot...depression,stress, everything....I've had the worst."
Posted by Unknown on "Goodbye" by Foreverlost28
- ""And then our souls released in the wind
Fall to dust with the devils grin
When the moon finds his twinkle gone
O how his tears will be drawn""
Posted by Unknown on "Black Fire" by Foreverlost28
- "I love the talk of the heavens in your eyes and the net of butterflies, it makes it sweet...not many people are good ta writing sweet poems, but you are, so what brought you to love this guy, what is it about him that makes you feel this way?"
Posted by Unknown on "A Wensday" by Foreverlost28
- ""And then our souls released in the wind
Fall to dust with the devils grin
When the moon finds his twinkle gone
O how his tears will be drawn"
That's the best part."
Posted by Unknown on "A true bedtime rhyme" by Foreverlost28
- "Time and Distance are the two butchers of Love! People change.. I'm glad that in this case Love wins!"
Posted by SinneR on "Torn" by Foreverlost28
- "A haunting depiction of the moon... Aside from the one typo I liked it :) (throne)."
Posted by Unknown on "Nyx" by Foreverlost28
- "If only your words were reflected, in she whom I chase.. Thank you for your poem."
Posted by Unknown on "Torn" by Foreverlost28
- "Damn you hit close to home in this one. But sometimes the guy that you want/need/love doesn't give half a shit about your feelings. I know how it feels and i know it hurts so much.
Great write, -mars"
Posted by Mars on "Empty Hands" by Foreverlost28
- "If I were with you right now, my heart would be in a twist, you would look at me in your usual cold way as you scribed my mistakes to your list.. ~Toxic... I think having others contribute is a fanstastic idea.. so here you go.. my line for If I was with you right now... good luck :o)"
Posted by ToxicLove on "If I Was With You Right Now" by Foreverlost28
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