Comments by All Members
- "this is good, i like the line, "alighted in it's air" it makes you wounder what the whole has been talking of. anyway good write"
Posted by IAmNorge on "The Orb of Blood" by Riven Waker
- "this is good, these lyrics seam as if to fit into a power-metal category, slightly reminiscent of iced earth to me, anyway good job, your one of my favorite lyrical writers on this site -ORioN "
Posted by IAmNorge on "Beneath the Assassins' Moon" by Riven Waker
- "this is epic, I feel as if this is written from a ancient soul, one who has seen much, out of curiosity the reference to the name "Yog-Sothoth", was that from stephen king by chance?"
Posted by IAmNorge on "O Great Cthulhu" by Riven Waker
- "wow...i don't really even know how to critique this....i'm not sure it needs it. very mystical and hightoned...detached and regal. nicely done...very nicely done indeed. p.s. i love the line 'they will taste the ether and love it'. gospel truth....total gospel."
Posted by ebonyamore on "Christ of the Blackheart" by Riven Waker
- "Visions and visitations, in the dead of night...I love those lines. They gave me chills when I read them. Short phrases-vast implications. "
Posted by Amaryllis on "Knightmaericka" by Riven Waker
- "I actually think this is pretty good, but I really feel the rhyming format is unsuitable with the language you wanted to frame in the scheme. The flow isn't wholly natural-feeling and although there's nothing wrong with the great word choices I think a more free verse format might have carried better weight for the poem. The best line for me was the 5th; I also enjoyed the contemporary occult feel, but it was a bit vague on the whole. Also the fact you broke the convention of the first 2 stanzas with the precceeding ones was baffling. I think this write above all else has potential but is hindered by its present format. Great title and ideas though.."
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "Knightmaericka" by Riven Waker
- "Hahaha indeed you are (to the last part)
I didn't mind it. But I think it could use more depth. Though it could just be me and my way of poetry."
Posted by Mithiras on "Eyes of the Dragon" by Riven Waker
- "words such as 'methinks' seem so archaic now; I never liked them in poetry before, I'm guessing you wanted that 'olden' feel but it was off-putting for me; I find that there's a sort of hackneyed Gothic style that seems to pervade poetry of this nature, trying to clamour for the atmosphere in very 'poetically' typical way - I find it off putting in truth, although some credence is due to the fact you're not as overtly eye-gougingly drossmatic as the 'emo' variations..Christ. I liked some the word choices here: sluggard/Gorgonite Overchild and the ideas...'a glance askance..': no thank you, sorry mate.. "
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "Bailiwick of Legerdemain" by Riven Waker
- "Calling them "words" just doesn't do them justice. I was floored. The feeling that this inspired in me is beyond anything. I adore writing like this, when it is done right, and this was right. Everything about it sang in perfect pitch. "
Posted by Drea on "O Great Cthulhu" by Riven Waker
- "These words serenaded me in a choir of sunken stargazers and the drowned decrepit. A very harmonious piece... so full of conviction and something not unlike romance. Enveloping and richly dark. I am impressed and completely awe-inspired. You pulled this off brilliantly. I commend you. "
Posted by Unknown on "O Great Cthulhu" by Riven Waker
- "Your words twist like barbed wire here. The first line is a poem, in and of itself. But the entirety of the piece reminds me a bit of an introduction to a novel of an equally haunting caliber. This is scathing, wicked, pulsing, merciless writing at it's best. Well done."
Posted by Unknown on "Shades of Enmity" by Riven Waker
- "Very interestingly woven with your words. I enjoyed reading this, and actually had to do it twice to get the full feeling. Well done."
Posted by Mylissa on "Shades of Enmity" by Riven Waker
- "Such a voice. Good grief. This is absolutely immaculate. If I had written this, I think I might be content never writing another thing again. But as an indulgent reader, I pray you don't decide to keep all your genius to yourself. I'd like to continue admiring. Thank you for sharing this. It has made an impact."
Posted by Unknown on "Six Sceptres Glowing In the Gloam - or - A Gert Attercop" by Riven Waker
- "it was actualy quite difficult to chew, especially the 3rd line. I think unlike Echo, you did go a touch over board with the words and maybe a few more lines in between with less heavier syntax might have benefitted. I loved the sound and feel of the first line though, unusual and unexpected and could have presented any manner of interesting tangents to work off, I just think you bogged it down with only 4 lines that almost seemed to want to say so much and in such a particular way without really doing so for me....it's interesting your approach though, I like the way you apply your imagination. Regards, Col :D"
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "Fey Wee Wyrm Upon Blackheart Branch" by Riven Waker
- "I like poems that veer towards this sort of creeping style however I feel that "Dark Poems" seem to sometimes equal 'Gothic Poems', as though the imagery has to HAVE that feel, that time or place...sometimes it's surprising to see more contemporary settings used for this nature of write and I just wish people could branch out more on the whole - and now I'm going off on a tangent, foolish me! However (again!) I didn't think it was a bad write, just a very familiar sort of ground. Irregardless many welcomes to DP.. "
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "Apostles of Darkness" by Riven Waker
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