fuck your disease.

By i tremble

you words
are laden with
cancerous undertones.

the rattle of
uncertainty lingers
upon your
vile breath
as you
showcase your
disease behind
glass eyes.

just so
you know,

your farewell
speech has
no great,
life-alternating
effect on
me.

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© 2007 jodeanna franks
Published on Tuesday, May 15, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Syringe On Saturday, February 2, 2008, Syringe (51)By person wrote:

    i like it. very succint..maliciously honest

  • unspeakable truth On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, unspeakable truth (94)By person wrote:

    I like this, direct, to the point. Cold, not sure. Might have to think on that. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: Very cold indeed, but you said what you needed to say Scholar

  • A former member wrote: whoop...that was to the point..nice. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: This was nice, well nicley written but the poem it's self was very cold.:) Scholar

  • blue On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    not very poetic, but the message is clear I guess. ~b

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    hah. I loved this. such a slap to the face. you're quite the poet.

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    gha!!!!!!! i asked and i received! doesnt i just urk you, the whole fall out of whatever? this stirkes me as strong, and the obviously blunt tone made me think of a pivited feet in the dirt, a strong stance...

  • The Zebra Warrior On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (1495)By person wrote:

    man you ramble!!

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    what can i say? im a ramblin man, magic man :)

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    revision fist line *it just urk you*

  • Bella Butchery On Tuesday, May 15, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    maybe stabbing a snake? take the pieces you want from him/her and leave the rest, but dont forget to learn, so in that respect, i hope there will be some effect. things will get better kiddo, life is full of curve balls.

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