Flawed.Empty.Torture
By BleedSilver
I was given to my facade
In hopes of never returning to myself again.
I wore my hope loosely 'round my wrist,
Tattered and slightly fading with age;
My heart is awash in the memories and reveries-
The cool summer air gently brushing agianst my face,
The rushing sound of a babbling brook
(The sound still brings a smile to my lips)
In the distant fairy tale woods.
I was given to the fact that leaves do fall sometimes,
The chill Autumn air biting at them like a Black asp,
It's poison creeps through, white fire
Until Winter's ire
Captures us all in his icy grasp.
I also know that once in Winter's hands,
Something in you dies.
Sometimes all of you dies.
I was given to the shadow,
The darkness covering the scorn and pain
Oft viewed upon my face, (Apathy is a whispered memory.)
Blanketing me in a lonesome mask of mistrusting silence.
No blemishes on my soul are visible
In the darkness I cast myself into so thoughtlessly...
But pain still parades about its invisible scars.
When I relized That I was given a body and mind so wrong,
So useless and flawed, nothing could have ever roused me
From my dark stupor.
I noticed a tree outside, struggling to survive.
I could only wish, hope, for the strength to stand
Without leaning on anyone, or anything else...
I could only feel sorry for the tree.
I was given to myself,(Flawed.)
I was given a glimpse of my soul. (Empty.)
I was given to the pain. (Torture.)
I was given life.
Comments on "Flawed.Empty.Torture"
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On Friday, June 24, 2005, SorrowSoul
(54) wrote:
An amazing write! Excellent way of conveying imagery. You really put an exclamation mark on this one with the ending.
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On Thursday, March 10, 2005, DeprivedOfReason
(30) wrote:
ouu ~@admiringly strokes the words on screen@~ Puurrty, me likeee a lot. Heh, shit this was awesome man, the imagery evoked was kick ass. The words easily empathized.
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A former member wrote:
this was wonderful.I loved the ending.
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On Tuesday, February 15, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(917) wrote:
damn....no comment could do this justice..but i shall try...every word i read sucked me in deeper into this write...i likes! hehe :P
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On Tuesday, February 15, 2005, Green-eyed Raven
(54) wrote:
I agree with the Crimson Queen... you cannot critique this with a small comment but this is an awesome piece.