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Paper Wishes
By Gideon Lost
Paper Wishes
Once there was a man
Who owned a paper sun, a paper moon, and a handful of paper stars
And when he was cold, his paper sun cast no warmth
And when he was lonely, his paper moon did not glow
And when he was unfortunate
Well, his paper stars would not fulfill his wishes
No matter how he tried
He could not realize his paper dreams
But he went on living his paper life
And when non-paper friends tried to remove his paper spectacles
He only threw up paper walls
So They banged their heads into the soft pulp
And prayed for rain.
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Copyright 2005 Gideon Lost
Published on Tuesday, January 4, 2005.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Paper Wishes"
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A former member wrote:
great idea. on the money.
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On Tuesday, February 12, 2008, xserratedsoulx
(212)
wrote:
LOVE it.
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A former member wrote:
I was drawn to this title, once more, this is a heart breaker right here amazing ~~GAP~~
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On Monday, June 19, 2006, Tonights Decision
(132) wrote:
the final lines , as said by others , wow.
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On Monday, December 5, 2005, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
*claps his heary palms* Wonderfull display of our emptyness
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On Sunday, September 11, 2005, Mistress Shadow
(249) wrote:
Wow, this is awesome. ~T~
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On Monday, September 12, 2005, Gideon Lost
(137) wrote:
A sincere thanks Mistress Shadow T. -Gideon
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A former member wrote:
This truly blew my mind...It has a sort of story-type but it's sad and that makes it so beautiful....amazing!
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On Monday, June 27, 2005, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
God, how I love this. So wonderfully put and such a unique take. "And prayed for rain" what a perfect ending line. This is lovely, I adore it.
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A former member wrote:
Great Write! I love it!!
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On Sunday, June 26, 2005, Sticky Kitty
(241) wrote:
beautiful. Fucking beautiful. -kitty
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On Wednesday, April 20, 2005, island warrior
(210) wrote:
Very well crafted. Top write.
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On Saturday, April 2, 2005, eastpatient
(47) wrote:
Diggin' the symbolism.
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A former member wrote:
omg, that was awesome, but awesome doesn't even describe it! because I have a short vocab, I can't tell you how good it was! I really enjoyed that!
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A former member wrote:
Awesome piece.
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A former member wrote:
that is by far THE BEST poem i've read in 2 or 3 years and it takes alot for me, good job man i am a huge fan!! keep it upand keep me posted
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On Thursday, January 27, 2005, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
aw man, i'm totally loving this! i admire your greatness :)
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A former member wrote:
wow this is fucking sad fucking good though
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A former member wrote:
thats sad..i like it. very unique.
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On Monday, January 24, 2005, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
This..may sound slightly odd,but this actually reminded me of the cover of this childrens book I remember reading in primary school..I sincerely liked this poem and I loved the last two lines..
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
very creative..an interesting and lovely write. nice job
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On Monday, January 10, 2005, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
Very interesting... the ending wrapped it up skillfully, though the whole work was well-executed. And perhaps a little return to nature would do the poet some good, no? ;)
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A former member wrote:
the flow of words is really well done...
i like your poem a whole lot.
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On Wednesday, January 5, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(917) wrote:
awesome job! loved it!
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On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
You, or someone had better upgrade your account right now, so you stick around Mr. 26.9%. A person who spits out writes of this magnitude deserve a fist full of cookies. [Kick ass shit fuck start card] - [D&A]
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A former member wrote:
I absolutely adore this. Especially the last two lines. I like the concept.
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On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, violetflames
(10) wrote:
i really, really like this.
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