Without Reason
By stuart_pid
In the shadowy depths of a desolate land,
in the heart of a darkness forgotten by man,
where the secrets of sorrow are silently kept
in the lingering memories of tears that are wept.
There's an empty white room without windows or doors.
Inside sits a child curled up on the floor.
With his knees to his chin and his hair in his hands
while he struggles with thoughts he cannot understand.
In the peak of his youth he was free to explore
so he focused his time on the search to know more.
It tickled his brain but he kept what he saw
so he then could pretend to make sense of it all.
But the more he discovered the less sense it made.
Until everything tangible started to fade.
And deeper he dove in the folds of his mind
while the passion he lived for fell further behind.
Existence had shifted and twisted his thinking
where reason was lost and his sanity sinking
and all which was once so incredibly clear
had evolved into mad, indescribable fear.
So he pondered and wandered upon his decision
to start the construction with utmost precision
this room without windows or doors but begin
from the outside and build with himself left within.
And when finished he felt just as empty inside
as the room where he now could eternally hide.
While the world moves on leaving this boy oblivious,
alone and engulfed in the bliss of his ignorance.
Haunted by thoughts that entangle his mind
and a deafening maddness intensly entwined.
So he waits with a fixated gaze on the walls
in a desperate attempt at forgetting it all.
Comments on "Without Reason"
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On Tuesday, February 1, 2005, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
great unraveling of the story line, your meter and rhymn is always perfect.
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On Monday, November 1, 2004, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
you have this way of unfolding a story in a smooth, sauve manner; metred, emphatical, and cadenced - it is truly captivating.... just beautiful. Thank you.
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A former member wrote:
oh now this is cool stuff stuart! i especially love that 4th stanza, awesome.
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A former member wrote:
great flowing cadence too.
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On Sunday, October 17, 2004, girlafraid
(479) wrote:
excellent flow...the rhyme never feels forced...i enjoyed the concept as well, very skillfully done...
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A former member wrote:
ah! I loved this. The flow and composition were superb. Brilliant write, sweets.
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A former member wrote:
wonderful concept, nicely done you are a joy to read as allways
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On Sunday, October 3, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
fantastic - in construct, rhythm, story and, again, perfect metre and rhymestyle. outstanding from beginning to end.
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On Sunday, October 3, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
wow! awesome write. the entire concept and imagery, expressed to perfection.
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A former member wrote:
You are flawless.