Slow Deconstruction
By stuart_pid
Inside this boy there lives a man
who knows not what is coming.
He only does what one boy can
to keep his world from crumbling.
The little boy stays locked away
behind his worried eyes.
No time for toys or child's play.
No time to wonder why.
He doesn't miss
the happiness
of which he never could posses.
He only fights
so others might
despair in life a little less.
This weight he bears
for many years.
Consumed by overwhelming fears.
He only gives
the life he lives
and learns to cry with silent tears.
The world he's known
has only shown
that in his fight he's all alone.
But still he tries
with sinking eyes
and so it goes until he's grown.
* * * * * *
Inside this man there lives a boy
who's struggling to be free.
The man who's will has been destroyed
no longer wants to be.
He looks within his weary heart
to find the child again.
The man, who's more than done his part,
is finally giving in.
"Come out and play"
the children say.
"It's such a lovely summer day.
For foolish fun
beneath the sun
we'll watch a lifetime waste away."
"It's time to be
completely free.
Forget responsibility."
"Come out and play"
the children say.
"The night is young and so are we."
He fast forgot
his troubled thoughts
and laughed for joy but worried not.
A careless child,
free and wild
until his life had come to naught.
* * * * * *
Inside this dying waste
there lives a lonely broken soul.
Forgotten by a world in which
he's never had control.
Lost inside the void he's tried
throughout his life to fill.
Swimming in emotions he's tried
all his life to kill.
Regretting life a little more
with every drawing breath,
he slowly closes vacant eyes
and welcomes waiting death.
Awards
Comments on "Slow Deconstruction"
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On Sunday, June 4, 2006, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
damn, you're such an amazing writer. as indefined said, you are a great storyteller - it always comes to life in your words, enacts before me - takes me into this world existing in the work. Thank you.
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On Tuesday, February 1, 2005, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
excellant description of a life that is but mediocre. always wanting but never finding.
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A former member wrote:
fucking killer! really well done man, i am seriously impressed, you're a great storyteller stuart. this is real to me man, i can feel it.
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On Friday, September 17, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
cold resignation from longterm disappointment...cutting souldeep through this piece; great metre and very well written throughout. very effective piece.
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On Friday, September 17, 2004, girlafraid
(479) wrote:
disappointment and struggle through the lifespan...what a sad piece, how terrible it is that alot of people live like this...very well written...
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A former member wrote:
*bows* fucking awesome I especially liked the "We'll watch a lifetime waste away" stansa
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On Friday, September 17, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
this was so painfully sad.. i loved the flow .. but above all, i could feel the struggle and anguish! beautiful work!
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On Friday, September 17, 2004, BleedSilver
(298) wrote:
The rhyme scheme is awesome, and the use of words is awesome. The message...know that is totally true. Its sad that society spends its time killing all of male emotions.
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A former member wrote:
Reminds me of the song "The Unforgiven", but 10x better. Rock on!
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A former member wrote:
I absolutely adored the structure of the words on this one. Niiice.