reverie of roses
By slow.burn.star
roses edged in gold creep slowly up the black ivory banister leading to
your room. melted red wax pooled at the base of each candle i laid around
your head. drifting slowly through the air in milky streaks, the scent
of honey twisted down the stairs and laid its lips upon my face. you're
eyes like fluttering doves at dawns rise. i could see you before i even
had this dream. you're nimbus of light still warm in my hands as i spun
myself with grace towards you. brushing open the gauzy white drapes that
enclosed your bed. the candles burned low like warm little stars. the black
coils of your hair cascaded in silken waves over the pillows, framing your
pale, placid face. i wanted to reach out and touch you, but instead i knelt
beside you. your mouth quivered, pink. you awoke; my alabaster reverie
& just as in my dreams before this,
you closed your porcelain hands around my neck
and delicately choked me to sleep.
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Comments on "reverie of roses"
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On Wednesday, December 24, 2014, Nimue44
(289) wrote:
Sweet, silkenee, delicate, like having an angel wing cover your face, and then, boom! Choking. The change from loving caresses to murderous caresses, how I enjoyed that.
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On Saturday, March 23, 2013, Scarrzz
(235) wrote:
I like the imagery and the flow, and what a delicious twist at the end that was! * You may want to do a quick proofread/edit, being careful of the your/you're trap. * Was it my imagination only, or were both figures in this dream feminine? Unusual, enjoyable eroticism.
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On Sunday, June 28, 2009, FallenSky
(42) wrote:
This felt like a stream of thought, speckled with beautiful images followed by disturbing ones and everything in between
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A former member wrote:
I don't think I've ever been this much effected by a piece in my life...it's so elaborate and sultry...up until the very last line. I must favorite.
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On Sunday, September 26, 2004, Revolting Theatre
(31) wrote:
wow
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On Monday, September 6, 2004, Dayer
(162) wrote:
very nice imagery, & I loved the ending
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On Monday, September 6, 2004, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
*just something about all of your writing that stands out....either way,this was beautiful..Butterfly..xxx...
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On Monday, September 6, 2004, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
'you're eyes like fluttering doves at dawn's rise'...the structure you've used here appears somewhat different to your usual style,though theres something about this that still makes it clear that this is your work...if that makes sense...just something a
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On Monday, September 6, 2004, ONEANDLONELY
(114) wrote:
first time reader...but not the last.. i enjoyed this, especially the ending...
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On Monday, September 6, 2004, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
no words are around to describe how this left me...fucking amazing...not just how it's written...but the emotions, the feelings it evoked. I love it when you post, don't leave us for that long again..