Beating the Storm

By Invader Lyn

her neck snapped to the rhythm of the rope
her life etched in patterns around her throat
finally she started to choke
to spite the words she never spoke

seemingly what she thought should admire
she found her heart to be a liar
there was nothing left of her entire
as she sliced clean through her broken wire

murder was the case
that she breathed through the lace
and as the wolf took chase
it burned off her face

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Copyright 2004 PurpleStellar
Published on Sunday, July 11, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • DoctorAsh On Monday, August 9, 2004, DoctorAsh (371)By person wrote:

    A very well displayed persona metaphor factory prodution sheet piece. If i were into [collecting] poems or purchasing them - this would be one i would tuck into a box. Wonderful type [D&A]

  • Lifeless On Saturday, August 7, 2004, Lifeless (38)By person wrote:

    At first I thought the rhyme was forced but I was wrong. It’s more complex. The piece was well written and (I concur) disturbing. I enjoyed this a lot.

  • NikesRain On Tuesday, July 13, 2004, NikesRain (1240)By person wrote:

    ...damn is right, horrific and thoroughly engaging. Nice job.

  • Seraphic On Sunday, July 11, 2004, Seraphic (209)By person wrote:

    the second stanza is my favorite, the whole piece has a nightmarish feel to it. I like it :) *~seraph~*

  • Dancing_Monkey On Sunday, July 11, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    the first part kinda ruled.. cous this have been writen tons of times, but for once I loved it.. maybe listening to tool made a difrence.. who knows..

  • Anth On Sunday, July 11, 2004, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    this is cool a feeling of being chased by something you cant outrun,great flow to this , excellent

  • A former member wrote: Brutal, tied in lace, run through fields of flowers painted lightly by the blood of children. Least that's what this made me think of. -END-

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