Brazil

By Belle

Desert.
65 days in blistering winter.
Unaware.
Ailing and bedridden we crawl.
Lust.
Lacking in what we need as lovers.
Suffer.
Craving is the cause of our complacency.
Error.
Let us not be faulty in abscence.
Heart.
Disparing in discouragement I fall.
Beloved.
Adulation was the strongest to start.
Vulnerable.
Weakness is a sign of warning.
Leaving.
Beat it into unearthly wanderings.
Destruction.
Chalk it up to irreconcilabe differences.
Abandoned.
For the city of paradise awaits.
Abandoned.
For the city of paradise awaits.
Abandonment.
The city of paradise awaits you.

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Published on Saturday, July 3, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Brazil"

On Monday, September 18, 2017, carlosjackal (2787) wrote:

This was very well done..Truths in spinal structure..
On Sunday, November 29, 2009, Riven Waker (317) wrote:

the structure reminds me of a spine - and similarly it conducts energy to a skilled climax - very well done
A former member wrote: city of gods..
On Monday, September 27, 2004, hate_doll (263) wrote:

wow, this is crazy, everyone's right, the structure is absolutely perfect for the feelings being conveyed, genius
On Sunday, July 4, 2004, Lynaes (854) wrote:

Tim nailed it, the structure is wonderful, and does draw you deeper and deeper. I loved "Lust. Lacking in what we need as lovers." awesome work Belle, wonderfully constructed.
On Saturday, July 3, 2004, NikesRain (1240) wrote:

...I agree with capt, the form, very intriguing, excellent ending also. Nicely done.
On Saturday, July 3, 2004, capt_funguy (777) wrote:

you built a waiting wall ... forces your attention , until its over ... structure and substance ... great combo .... very cool ... funguy
On Saturday, July 3, 2004, whispers in the night (11) wrote:

great work...keep it up
A former member wrote: I love the ending...this is a great piece. It all ties in together...and the structure is perfect.